Seigen Posted May 25, 2006 Author Posted May 25, 2006 There! Fixed!!. Now hopefully i can get approved by two more people now
Kouta Posted May 25, 2006 Posted May 25, 2006 Oh my god! Do you not listen when they tell you things? You have giant gaps in the middle of sentences that just break it up uselessly. Fix that!
Guest Rara-chan Posted May 25, 2006 Posted May 25, 2006 (Chakra) 65(5) I'm assuming that this is your 'Natural Growth' stat? Yeah... You don't get the +5 until you actually level up. o.o
Kouta Posted May 26, 2006 Posted May 26, 2006 (edited) What they meant earlier was that in the skill natural growth, you have to say where it say (Insert Stat), you need to put (Ninjutsu) or whatever the stat is...so it looks like this: Instead of Natural Growth (Insert Stat) it says Narutal Growth (Chakra) _-----------------------_ Amd still..your bacxkground lack definition...and still you have no fixed the giant spaces! No, I won't do it for you..you have to learn how to read and go edit. As for what to define... -Exactly what happened in "Abuse" for that can be many things. -How did you respond? Where you just sitting there like a pincushion while he did this? -Why do you only like girls? Edited May 26, 2006 by Kouta
Ironwolf Posted May 26, 2006 Posted May 26, 2006 Okay, I have a question. How can you say that his mother was training in the ninja arts and then in the very next paragraph say that she and his dad ignored him? Moreover, how can he have 'no friends because of his eyes' and still talk to the ladies? He is obviously going for the loner archetype, with the 'no need for friends' deal, but then you have him as the ladies man? Stick to one idea of what your character is going to be like. Also, please check your spelling, grammar and punctuation.
shizuki Posted May 26, 2006 Posted May 26, 2006 You have two points left over. I highly recommend you spend them.
Seigen Posted May 26, 2006 Author Posted May 26, 2006 So now i can get my stuff changed to kumo nin .... right?
shizuki Posted May 27, 2006 Posted May 27, 2006 YOU ARE NOT FULLY APPROVED. YOUR BADGERING HAS GOTTEN YOU INTO A VILLAGE, BUT ALSO GOTTEN YOU BANNED FROM THAT VILLAGE. TRY AGAIN SOMEWHERE ELSE.
