Volratho Posted September 26, 2006 Posted September 26, 2006 (edited) ~User Data~ -Username: Volratho -Posting: Once a day -Time Zone: Central Standard Time ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~Basics~ Name: Dirne Doente Village: Iwa Allegiance: Resistance Clan: N/A Age: 22 Gender: Female ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~Appearance~ -Height: 5’6 -Weight: 150 lbs -Hair Color: Black -Eye Color: Crimson -Clothing: Doente wears a brown brazier and pale green vest. On her waist, she wears a thick brown studded belt with large silver buckle. On her forarms she has the most distictive piece of clothing, the long sleeves. Thesw start at just above the elbow and finish just past her fingertips. These sleeves allow her to hide her assortment or kunai, shurikens, and needles, as well as allow her to preform seals without the enemy seeing them. On her legs she has a pair of palegeen and tan cargo style shorts. -Physical Description: Doente has got shoulder length black hair that falls into her eyes and usually likes to stick up in the back. Her skin is a light tan skin and has red eyes. Doente has no visable scars on her body since she tends to shy away from the physical type of fighting like taijutsu. A few more pictures: By Eechi-go By Button ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~History~ Background: ~Excerpt from the Diary of Dirne Doente I have always wanted to be a ninja, ever since I could say the word shinobi. When I was younger, I always looked forward to when my Aunt and Uncle would come around, which sadly wasn’t very often. You see, my father, Dirne Klein, had a falling out with his brother, Tod. This all happened long before me or my cousin Nanase were born. My father believed heavily in Ninjutsu, whereas my uncle always boasted about the power of Taijutsu. This rift lead my father to move out of Iwa and find a new beginning. Growing up away from Iwa at first was a boring… We lived in a small village; it was just one of those specks on the map that no one cared about. Being raised like this was nice to a point because you knew everybody in the village, and everybody knew you. Secrets in a place like this were basically non-existent. These are also the two main reasons that living in a place like this was so difficult. Everybody knew you, and you could never get away with anything because the truth always traveled faster than you. All in all though the town was very peaceful, and everyone lived happy. Slightly more than two years ago, my cousins started at the Iwa ninja academy. I had mixed emotions about this, I felt like I should be there as well, but I had responsibilities to my mother and the family that had to be taken care of first. Being the only child in the family, there were a lot of duties put on me especially when my father left the village for one thing or another. After Nanase graduated from the academy, she would come around every so often to spend time with me and the family. Usually these times were spent with her telling stories of the different types of training she has been through and what being a shinobi was all about. I knew I was really jealous about her getting to be a ninja and be being stuck at home, but there wasn’t much I could really do about it, so I tried to be really happy for her. As the months pasted, Nanase’s visits became more and more frequent and I finally found out why. It seems that my father was not the only who had a falling out with my Uncle Tod. My cousin being a ninja focused on ninjutsu just as my father had and Uncle Tod did not like this too much and he two had many fights over this very subject and Nanase used these trips to our house to cool down and collect herself. One day, this fight must have hit a climax because Nanase finally moved in with us full time. When she arrived she had none of her ninja gear what so ever, which I thought was kind of strange since she prided herself as a ninja and wore it everywhere. A few days later when she calmed down a bit, we learned why she was here and why all of her gear was missing, as it turned out, her father wanted to “protect” her and forced her to resign from active ninja duty. This pushed her over the edge and she finally left for good. That’s when it happened, Kumo’s invasion. It was just after supper time and we were all just hanging around the house and no one really wanted to go out of the house tonight because of the huge thunderstorm that was currently rolling through. It was just starting to get late and Nanase was trying to teach me about the clone technique since she noticed that I seemed to really like different types of genjutsu, when my mother came into the room with a letter and said it had just came for Nanase. I thought it was odd that someone would deliver a letter in a storm like this, so I figured it must have been important. That thought turned out to me the understatement of my life. Like a flash my cousin was gone. In her haste, she dropped the letter, and my curiosity got the better of me. When I read the letter, it told about Kimo’s invasion of earth country, and the mass slaughter in Iwa. It went on to describe how my uncle and other cousin fought bravely, but were slain in battle. This was the turning point for me, I wanted to train to be the best shinobi that I could and make Kimo pay for what they did to my family and to my country. That day training ceased to be an afternoon leisurely activity and became what I did everyday from dawn until dusk if I could. I trained my body, but mostly my mind. I wanted to become the best at genjutsu so that I could give my enemies the same kind of nightmares that they caused my family to relive every night. It was a few days later when Nanase came back wearing her ninja gear. She informed us about the details of what happened and of Kumo’s threats of no more ninjas. I could see in her eyes that she would definitely not be following their rules, and I know that neither would I. Everyday like clockwork my cousin would leave the house with one excuse or another and would come home later at night completely exhausted. We all knew what she was doing and I think we all also agreed on that it had to be done but we would never voice our ideas because we knew what would happen if what we were thinking ever got out to the NCIA, Nanase especially would be in trouble. When I was able to I would sneak out and try to spy on her when ever possible to see how a real shinobi trains. When I was successfully able to observe her, I would watch as she created brand new techniques that seem to consist of entirely earth and fire elements. When I saw this out, I redoubled me efforts to try and perfect the few techniques that knew from either Nanase telling me about, or from observing her train when I could. When I felt comfortable with the skills I now possessed, I tried to create some original techniques with limited to no success, but I am not giving up yet. I cannot wait until I can actually train with my cousin and get stronger. Because when we do, Kumo you better be watching out, we are coming after you. ~End of Excerpt To be continued... ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~Persona~ Personality: Doente is a laid kind of person most of the time. Has a good hearted personality and will help any one of her friends or family at the drop of a pin. When in combat or in any other situation concerning Kumo, a whole different personality emerges. She get focused and nothing will stop her until she has achieved her goal or died trying. Likes: Being with family and friends, especially her cousin Nanase Dislikes: Kumo first and foremost. ~Favorite~ -Food: Ramen! -Color: Red -Music Genre: Rock -Book Genre: Supernatural -Hangout: At home, or the training grounds ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Ninja Stats Rank: Chuunin Level: 34 TXP: [8733 / 9000] -Stats- (out of 3800) (Health Power) 520 (Stamina) 300 (Chakra) 500 (Taijutsu) 20 (Ninjutsu) 40 (Defence) 400 [440] (Genjutsu) 700 (Concentration) 600 (Speed) 520 (Accuracy) 40 (Evasion) 160 [200] ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~Skills~ Starting ---------------> 2 SP Hindering skills -------> 6 SP Levels 1 - 10 ---------> 10 SP Levels 11 - 34 ---------> 12 SP Chuunin ---------------- > 2 SP Skill Points Used ------> 24 SP Remaining Skill Points: 5 Skills:. - Quick Learner Details: +10% EXP From Missions and Training. EXP given as holiday gifts or handed out from events by the staff are not included in this. Cost: -2 - Taijutsu Style (Ox Style) Effect: User is able to access techniques of style (). Description: The user has managed to learn the basics of a Taijutsu style, and, knowing this, the path is opened to powerful techniques. Ranks:1 Cost: 0 - Brahma, The Creator Details: Genjutsu of the user will deal an additional 10% more Ghost Damage or stat reduction effect. This multiplier applies to the base damage of the technique, and in this case and this case only - allows you to break the base damage cap. In addition to this, Genjutsu stat reduction effects will last one post longer. This may not, however, exceed the maximum duration of five post effect duration. You may not use any Jutsu that's element is not that of your home village. Cost: -3 - Genjutsu Shaper For every rank in this skill, status effects inflicted by Genjutsu will last one post longer. This will not allow you to break the maximum post duration of any status effect. Ranks 2 Cost -2 (-3) - The Path of the Warrior (Genjutsu Warrior & Taijutsu Warrior) Details: Genjutsu: Gain 1 extra Jutsu Point every other level. May take 2 ranks of 'Genjutsu Creator' for 1 skill point -Taijutsu: The skill 'Martial Artist' no longer has a 5-post Jounin restriction. May take 2 Ranks of 'Martial Artist' for 1 skill point. Cost: -1 - The Path of The True Warrior Description: Through devotion to their chosen disciplines, or in many cases simple innate talent, the shinobi-nin whom might be called 'true warriors' have grown to be masters of their art, or well on the way to being masters. Effect: Every 5 levels gain another Jutsu Point. In addition, pick one of the below. It must align with one of the two options you chose in 'Path of the Warrior'. Advanced Genjutsu Warrior: 'Brahma the Creator' no longer has the restriction of not being able to use Elemental Jutsus of different Villages. May take 2 ranks of 'Genjutsu Shaper' for 3 skill points. Genjutsu used by this user now use the Ninjutsu Damage Cap for Ghost Damage Dealt. Cost: -1 - Genjutsu Creator Details: Genjutsu drain 5 more points per the user's rank in this skill. If the user uses a Genjutsu which deals stat damage to multiple statts then the user must choose it to apply only to one of these stats. This is inclusive of modifiers. Cost: -1 Ranks: 10 -MAX- (5 SP invested, Path of the Warrior effect: 2 ranks per 1SP) - Name: Chakra Flow Description: The Chakra circulatory system can be 'trained' to flow more efficiently, although this takes a great deal of time and effort from the Ninja. Restriction: User may not have any other skill (or bloodline skill) that effects Health, Stamina, or Chakra Regeneration. These skills may not be taught - Rank 1 Effect: Gain 10% of your Total Chakra every turn. This replaces normal Chakra regeneration. Cost: -5 -Knowing the Elements Once per your rank in this skill you may negate the damage from a Ninjutsu attack against you. The incoming attack cannot be of a higher rank than your own. This may not be used against an attack from a Ninja of higher Ninja Rank to your own. Does not negate the effects of selected jutsu. Ranks: 1 Cost: -2 -Spelunker: Rocky Terrain Bonus Gives +%20 speed in rocky terrain. A ninja with this skill suffers half of all environmental damage. Cost: 0 - Advancement Seal (Taijutsu) Details: You may only have 50% points in this stat as there are in your lowest non advancement sealed stat. So if you have Advancement seal on genjutsu and the lowest other stat you have is defense, with a score of 100, you can only have a max of 50 genjutsu. Cost: +1 -Overcome Your Problems [Advancement Seal (Taijutsu)] With this skill, you may get rid of a hindering trait you have. You must spend X skill points (X being how many points the hindering trait gave you) to remove it. Cost: -1 - Advancement Seal (Stamina) Details: You may only have 50% points in this stat as there are in your lowest non advancement sealed stat. So if you have Advancement seal on genjutsu and the lowest other stat you have is defense, with a score of 100, you can only have a max of 50 genjutsu. Cost: +1 -Overcome Your Problems [Advancement Seal (Stamina)] With this skill, you may get rid of a hindering trait you have. You must spend X skill points (X being how many points the hindering trait gave you) to remove it. Cost: -1 - Poor Stamina Manipulation Details: Before using a Taijutsu technique, roll a d10. On 1or2 Jutsu fails. You may not take another action this turn, but the stamina is not lost. May not have Sealed Taijutsu Cost: +2 -Overcome Your Problems [Poor Stamina Manipulation] With this skill, you may get rid of a hindering trait you have. You must spend X skill points (X being how many points the hindering trait gave you) to remove it. Cost: -2 - River of Red Effect: Once every four weeks for four RL days this character will lose 1 health point per two hours for 72 hours by means of natural bleed damage, accumulating to total of 36 health points lost. Health lost automatically regenerates after the time period is up. This character does not suffer this damage if they are pregnant. This may only be overcome when this character is 50 years of age, if the character has the skill "Anorexia Nervosa", or if they purchase particular items that pertain to this skill. The first time this skill takes effect is when it is taken and occurs every 28 days from when the natural bleed damage stops. Description: When young girls come of age they are cursed with a cycle that will not leave them for most of their years. For several days, seemingly to some as a random time during the month women will go through an experience which will bring about dramatic hormone changes causing severe changes in mood and personality; in some instances this change in mood has brought about the death of others. Nappers is Evil [Requirement]: May only be taken by female characters. This skill is mandatory for all female characters and must be taken at the earliest age of 9 years old; if it is not taken through their years then at the age of 16 years old- they automatically gain this skill, unless they were born into menopause. Cost: +1 - PMS/PMT Effect: This character suffers cramps so painful that any and all ninja activies, or any activity besides lying around with a hot water bottle on one's stomach, are considered sinful. Side-effects of this are that that this character now has lethal accuracy when throwing things at idiots who suggest ninja activities, or any activity besides lying around wit ha hot water bottle on one's stomach. Foul temper. Foul temper. And foul temper. Possible ACNE. Raging hormones. And most importantly; cursing all that is life. This effect only applies when 'River of Red' is active. Description: The bane of the male populous. Cost: Comes free when 'River of Red' is purchased. -Merciful Details: Whenever you would deal the finishing blow in combat to an opponent, you must let them live with one HP left, only applies once a battle. Cost: +1 -Overcome Your Problems [Merciful] With this skill, you may get rid of a hindering trait you have. You must spend X skill points (X being how many points the hindering trait gave you) to remove it. Cost: -1 -Water Specialty Effect: User can use water based ninjutsu (no need for Subtle Elements) and has a +10% stat reduction or addition with all attacks. Water-derived jutsu cost one less JP to a minimum of 1. Description: Naturally aligned to the element of the water, this character has a natural tact at using and manipulating water to their bidding. These characters are often solemn, and have uncannily good aim. Restrictions: You get one specialty at level 20, one at level 50, and one at level 100. Level 20: 10 post Jounin training. Level 50: 5 post Kage training. Level 100: No training. Cost: -0 Skills learned from Jounins: ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~Techniques~ Starting ------------------------> 4 Path of the Warrior ----------> 17 Path of the true Warrior --- > 2 Levels 1 - 15 ------------------> 15 Levels 16 - 30-----------------> 30 Levels 31 – 34 ---------------> 12 Christmas Bonus -------------> 2 Chuunin ------------------------> 5 Christmas Bonus '09 --------> 4 91 JP Basic Academy Jutsus: Bunshin no Jutsu (Clone Technique) Type: Genjutsu Rank: Academy Student Cost: 10x Description: Creates an illusionary replica of the user. It is unable to attack or interact with other objects, but can serve as a good distraction. Effect: Adds +5x evasion and +5x accuracy for each clone. Once a clone is hit it is destroyed, and the bonuses with it. A bunshin is considered to have 0 evasion and rolls to dodge whenever it is targeted in the user's response phase. The value of x is the number of clones you have made. Maximum of 8 bunshin can be made. Name: Henge no Jutsu (Transformation Technique) Type: Genjutsu Rank: Academy Student Cost: 5 Genjutsu Description: Wrap chakra around your body to change your appearance. You can still use the features of the thing you can become, e.g use the claws of a clawed animal, but not to the extent of if you were that thing. Damage: None Effects: Change your appearance. Name: Kawarimi no Jutsu (Body Substitute Technique) Type: Ninjutsu Rank: Academy Student Cost: 10 Ninjutsu Description: A lifesaver, and a must-have technique. With this technique, the user is able to swap their body with a nearby object, usually a log, which will take the full force of any incoming blows for them, while they retreat to safe ground or search for an opening. You can only use this 3 times per battle. Damage: None Effects: Evade the next attack aimed at you. You are unable to attack the opponent the turn you use this. You can only use this 3 times per battle. This technique cannot be used to dodge Ninjutsu, Taijutsu or Genjutsu Techniques. Other Jutsus: 35 JP remaining Name: Prism (Sanryoukyou) Type: Genjutsu Rank: Genin Cost: 48 Damage: N/A Effect:: -60 accuracy. Double effects on Uchiha, Hyuuga, or other "mystic eye" bloodline types regardless of if the effects of the eyes are activated or not. Lasts 2 posts. Description: A brilliant crystalline piece of rock juts from the earth and shatters in a blinding explosion of light, blinding the opponent. Ninjas used to relying on enhanced forms of eyesight suffer especially badly from this technique. Points: 2 Sacred Arrow of the Phantom (Genzou Hamaya) Type: Genjutsu Rank: Gennin Cost: 26 Chakra Damage: 10 Ghost Damage Effect: Target has a -20 Evasion when dodging this technique. Description: A surprisingly quick attack, the user of this technique only needs to perform one quick hand seal to release Chakra into the air; this Chakra will affect a target's mind and cause him/her/it to imagine an arrow being shot at him/her/it. Points: 2 Name: Divine Punishment Shard (tenrai kei kire no jutsu) Type: Genjutsu Rank: Genin Cost: 40 Damage: 40 (ghost) Effects: N/A Description: After making the appropriate seals, the user of this jutsu extends their hands out toward the target. The target sees shards of crystal erupting from the user’s extended hands which are aimed at the target. Points: 2 Divine Disjunction Level 1 Type: Genjutsu (Void / Personal) Rank: Genin Cost: 80 Chakra Damage: 0 [Ghost Damage] Effect: Vulnerable and confused for one turn; may only be used once per battle. Description: Upon being struck by this jutsu, the target can not move properly. This technique alters the brain. When the user tries to move on of their arms, their opposite leg will move instead. Also if the target tries walk or use their leg, theirs opposite arm will be moved. For example: When the target ninja tries to move their left arm, the brain will make their right leg move. When the target tries to move their left leg, their right arm will move. Points: 4 Restrictions: Must learn this Genjutsu from Dirne Doente Divine Disjunction Level 2 Type: Genjutsu (Void / Personal) Rank: Chunin Cost: 150 Chakra Damage: 25 [Ghost Damage] Effect: Vulnerable and Stunned for one turn, then confused during the following turn. Description: This technique alters the brain. When the user tries to move, the brain will direct the signal to the wrong part of the targets body and thus a random muscle will move instead. For example: When the target ninja tries to move their left arm, their brain could send the signal to any other muscle in the body so there eye might twitch. The signal for each muscle is always rerouted to the same corresponding muscle. Doing this much switching of nervous system puts pressure on the brain causing slight damage to occur. Points: 5 (Evolution +1) Restrictions: Must learn this Genjutsu from Dirne Doente Name: Body Shatter (Hada Kireme) Type: Genjutsu Rank: Genin Cost: 80 Chakra Damage: 20 Ghost Damage Effect: Terrified for 2 turns Description: Victim imagines user swinging a large hammer at them. Upon contact, they feel as if there entire body begins to break apart and shatter. This experience is short lived, but leaves the victim terrified. Points: 4 Bleeding Earth (Shukketsu Tsuchi) Type: Genjutsu (Earth) Rank: Chuunin Cost: 107 Chakra Damage: N/A Effect: -40 to Accuracy and Evasion. Lasts 2 posts. Description: The battlefield appears to break open at the stone ninjas command and rivers of lava come rushing up to greet the opponent, forcing them to spend much of their attention dodging and avoiding the lava, making it harder to hit or avoid the ninja using the jutsu. Points: 4 Water Type; Sea Sickness Type: Genjutsu (Water) Rank: Chuunin Cost: 90 Damage: N/A Effect: Opponent is left “Sickened” for 3 turns. Description: Using Genjutsu the Shinobi causes the opponent to feel the simulated effects that Sea Sickness gives people. Particularly useful against those weak of the mind and can cripple the strongest Taijutsu fighters. Points: 3 Oboe Sonmou Ninjutsu Type: Genjutsu Rank Chuunin Cost: 150 Chakra, 105 Upkeep, max of 5 turns. Damage: N/A Effect: Reduces the opponent's Ninjutsu by 225 for Description: Using the art of the mind, the user of this genjutsu has learned how to at least temperarily make the user forgot minor pieces of their memory. The user makes the opponent forget parts of his or her own training thus their overall effectiveness in battle is lowered. This technique focuses on the training in the art of Ninjutsu. Cost: 5JP Oboe Sonmou Taijutsu Type: Genjutsu Rank Chuunin Cost: 150 Chakra, 105 Upkeep, max of 5 turns. Damage: N/A Effect: Reduces the opponent's Taijutsu by 225 for Description: Using the art of the mind, the user of this genjutsu has learned how to at least temperarily make the user forgot minor pieces of their memory. The user makes the opponent forget parts of his or her own training thus their overall effectiveness in battle is lowered. This technique focuses on the training in the art of Taijutsu. Cost: 5JP Oboe Sonmou Genjutsu Type: Genjutsu Rank Chuunin Cost: 150 Chakra, 105 Upkeep, max of 5 turns. Damage: N/A Effect: Reduces the opponent's Genjutsu by 225 for Description: Using the art of the mind, the user of this genjutsu has learned how to at least temperarily make the user forgot minor pieces of their memory. The user makes the opponent forget parts of his or her own training thus their overall effectiveness in battle is lowered. This technique focuses on the training in the art of Genjutsu. Cost: 5JP Name: Mottomo Ada Type: Genjutsu Rank: Chuunin Cost: 120 Damage: 50 Effect: Target is under the status effect "Quarantine; Ninjutsu" for 2 turns. Description: The user, having fought against ninjutsu users her entire life, has noticed a common thread in most of her fights. She noticed that when she messed with certain parts of an opponent's brain while in battle, that their ninjutsu became less effective. Utilizing this information, the ninja tried to hone this effect and turn it into a true advantage on the battlefield. Eventually the creator of this technique realized that she would only be able to alter the brain for so long until the opponents brain overcame the genjutsu and made itself temporarily immune to this technique. Points: 4 Name: Kurakura Type: Genjutsu Rank: Chuunin Cost: 80 Damage: 50 Effect: Target is dizzy for one turn Description: Knowing from personal experience how hard it is to concentrate while dizzy, the user of this technique looks to capitalize on that. The user uses his or her chakra to produce a sense of vertigo, or rapid spinning in the opponent's mind. Points: 3 Yakujo Gekijin Type: Genjutsu Rank: Chuunin Cost: 120 Damage: 75 Effect: Target is Confused for 2 turns. Description: Molding chakra to do exactly what you want it to do is an art form that takes years to master, but only moment to mess up. The user aims disrupt the target at the key moment that they are trying to mold their chakra into a usable form. The user sends his or her chakra into the user's brain and it sits there waiting for the opponent to preform a technique, and when he or she does, it momentarily shows the target gruesome images either from the opponents past or made up if necessary. These illusions if timed right have the effect of distracting the user during key points of forming a technique that could have dangerous consequences for the target. Points: 4 Shuukai Magomago (Mass Confusion) Type: Genjutsu AoE Rank: Chuunin Cost: 120 Damage: N/A Effect: All targets are confused for one turn. Allies not affected. Description: Knowing that teamwork is essential to take on larger numbers or stronger opponents, the creator of this technique was looking for a way to break down any kind of cohesiveness a team might have. Points: 4 Jutsus learned from Jounins: ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~Inventory~ Armor: Chuunin Vest -Head: -Neck: Angel Wing Necklace (D.E.W) -Body: -Waist: -Upper arm(s): Hitai-Ate -Forearm(s): Detached Sleeves. -Hand(s): -Thigh(s): -Calve(s): -Feet: brown boots Weapons: -Main Weapon: -Sub Weapon: -Un-equipped Slot one: +5 Candy -Un-equipped Slot two: -Un-equipped Slot three: -Extra: Turkey Dinner Items-- Armor Kind: Detached SleevesBody Placement: Arms Attributes: +40 Item Slots (20 in each sleeve) , Genjutsu Amplifier: Rank 2, Indestructible. Special: These sleeves flow past the user's hands and can easily obscure them from sight. When so being used, opponents cannot see what seals are being preformed or if the user is holding a small sized item. The sleeves have a special metal weave embedded into the fabric that is infused with chakra. This weave is designed to keep prying eyes away. The weave automatically distorts the outline of any object inside the sleeves including the user's arms and hands. The chakra infused wires also block vision that would normally see through solid objects. Description: These sleeves are normally light brown in color, but can be died any color, and at a distance look like ordinary clothing, but if someone where to look up close, they would see that there are tiny wires interwoven with the fabric. These wires have two purposes, first it more efficiently transfers chakra that has been molded into Genjutsu leave the user's body, and secondly it gives the whole garment strength, both to hold items, and to be very durable. Items are held, and attached on the inside of the sleeves so that they can be consealed from onlookers. Items of medium size and smaller can be held by the sleeves. Two sleeves come as a 'set'. Cost: 950 Item Slots left: 25 Items in sleeves: - 3 Shuriken - 14 Kunai - 4 Needles (Stolen)NCIA: Gennin VestArmor Kind: NCIA Vest Body Placement: Chest Attributes: +20 Defence, +20 Resistance, +20 Evasion. Special: +5 Weapon Slots Description: This all black over-vest is much like a traditional Chuunin vest in appearance. Serves primarily as a uniform so that members of the proud Ninja Crime and Investigation Agency are easily identifiable by the public in general. Above the left breast pocket is the wearers name-tag which also has the emblem of their unit; Kusagakure, Konohagakure, etcetera. Cost: -- ; recieved upon registering with the NCIA. Armor Kind: VestBody Placement: Chest Attributes: +40 Defence, +40 Evasion. Special: +15 Weapon Slots Description: An over-vest worn by Shinobi of the Chunnin rank. Color and style changes based on each village. (Stolen)Identification Card [Anya Iikagen]Item Type: ID Card Item Slots Taken: -- Description: A laminated identification card, simply a must have when apprehending troublesome and mischievous people within The Empire's realm, no one wants to be accused of falsely impersonating an NCIA officer.. Keeping the peace, the duty of the Ninja Crime and Investigation Agency. This simple card bears the name, passport photo sized picture, and general information of the officer; assigned unit, date of registration, etcetera. Cost: -- ; recieved upon registering with the NCIA -Items in Vault: Nothing -Money on hand: $500 Name: Candy Item Slots Taken: 1 Per 5 Effect: Recovers 5 Stamina Description: Delicious sweets that are sure to give you a sugar rush if you eat too many! Name: Turkey Dinner Item Slots Taken: 0 Effect: Afflicts the opponent with the status effect 'Asleep' for one turn due to the goodness of savory, delicious, family gathering around the table turkey. Animals— ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~Update Log~ Character Approval: Cntrstrk14: APPROVED Sept 26, 2006 Ryuu: s'approved Sept 26, 2006 Ichi-Kun: Approved Sept 27, 2006 Leveled up: level 0 - level 2 -----> Oct. 12, 2006 level 2 - level 3 -----> Oct. 13, 2006 level 3 - level 5 -----> Oct. 15, 2006 level 5 - level 6 -----> Oct. 19, 2006 level 6 - level 8 -----> Oct. 23, 2006 level 8 - level 11 ---> Oct. 24, 2006 level 11 - level 12 --> Nov. 03, 2006 level 12 - level 13 --> Nov. 10, 2006 level 13 - level 14 --> Nov. 22, 2006 level 14 - level 16 --> Jan. 21, 2007 level 16 - level 17 --> Aug. 17, 2007 level 17 - level 21 --> Dec. 12, 2007 level 21 - level 24 --> Oct. 25, 2008 level 24 – level 34 --> Aug. 28, 2009 Exp Earned: 217 exp --> Nappers: [approved] 88 exp --> Ichi-kun: App 195 exp --> cntrstrk14: TRAINING APPROVED! *Thumbs up* 165 exp --> Nappers 234 exp --> Ichi-kun: Training Approved 54 exp --> Bonds Forged 304 exp --> Ichi-kun: Word up 142 exp --> Ichi-kun: Word G unit 110 exp --> Nappers: D Rank Mission: approved. 199 exp --> Ichi-kun: Word 220 exp --> Nappers: Unpaved Roads~ 396 exp --> Purity: Training App'd 330 exp --> Cntrstrk14: C Rank Miision: Out and about 948 exp --> Cntrstrk14: The Island 55 exp --> Cntrstrk14: The Island 27 exp --> Cntrstrk14: Wondering Souls 660 exp --> Cntrstrk14: I Said Heaven Ain't Close In A Place Like This 242 exp --> Greensleeves~ 47 exp --> ~reminiscence 4000 exp --> Time Skip 100 exp --> Calling All Ages ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~Money Log~ Nappers: +$70 Nappers: +$200 Cntrstrk14: +$125 Kouta: Christmas Bonus: +$300 Christmas Bonus '08: +$200 Time Skip: +$400 Detached Sleeves: -$950 Christmas Bonus '09: +$50 IAF Enrollment Fee: -$20 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~Battle Log~ Wins: 1 I Said Heaven Ain't Close In A Place Like This Losses: 0 Draws: 0 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~Mission Log~ Rank D: 7 Keeping The Streets Safe ((6 Time Skip Missions)) Rank C: 15 Unpaved Roads~ Out and About ((13 Time Skip Missions)) Rank B: 0 Rank A: 0 Rank S: 0 Edited February 2, 2010 by Volratho
Daisuke Zala Posted September 26, 2006 Posted September 26, 2006 (edited) very nice. I see you posted some clothing, maybe put it in the clothing section not just the physical description. The physical description is the look of your character like long jet black hair and green eyes that are always covered with his jet black silky hair. So your background is in first person. Hmm intresting so your character is telling a story or something? (It is cool just i don't see that a lot.) Also maybe put int he -basics- if you are either kumo or resistance. Edited September 26, 2006 by Daisuke Zala
Volratho Posted September 26, 2006 Author Posted September 26, 2006 Thanks, I edited what i thought was needed and added the pic i had of the character
triva Posted September 26, 2006 Posted September 26, 2006 (edited) Well there are only two things wrong with it I see. One is you need to put your background into in second person mode. So you need to fix that. Also you have way too many skills. You are only allowed two points only. That’s means you can only have two skills only, or you can have one skill with two points on it. For starter for the skill I would start out with quick learner that is always good when trying to learn new tech. Just fix those little errors then you should be fine. If I missed any errors; my peers well try to help you if you let them. Edited September 26, 2006 by triva
Guest Nack Posted September 26, 2006 Posted September 26, 2006 Her skills are fine, keep scrolling Triva, she has hindering traits as well. Dislikes should be Kumo not Kimo I think. (whats kimo?) between village and clan you need a section. Alliance:Resistance
Volratho Posted September 26, 2006 Author Posted September 26, 2006 Thanks for catching my spelling mistakes, all changed.
Guest Ichi-kun Posted September 26, 2006 Posted September 26, 2006 Im not to sure on the background if it has to be in Third person, you have it in First, but I dont know if you have to change it or not. Ill let another mod say if it does, I don't see a huge issue with it, but no idea.
Volratho Posted September 26, 2006 Author Posted September 26, 2006 Well i have always been more comfortable writing in first person perspective, and I thought that this made it a little more personal for the reader. If it came down to it, I would change it if neccessary, but if it is not needed, then I would raher keep it in first person.
cntrstrk14 Posted September 26, 2006 Posted September 26, 2006 backgrounds can be written any way they feel comfortable. Change your physical description to put the clothing in the clother area, etc. THe physical description should be rather short, it is a description of your body type and this is where you put if you have any scars, tatoos, piercings, etc.
cntrstrk14 Posted September 26, 2006 Posted September 26, 2006 not to be picky, but could you throw some kind of clothing description in there. I know you got a picture but an empty field like that is just... kinda wrong.
Volratho Posted September 26, 2006 Author Posted September 26, 2006 henshuu no jutsu (edit technique)
r4nd0m Posted September 26, 2006 Posted September 26, 2006 you mispelled kumo (kimo ) and since your stamina is sealed shouldn't it be 0?
Volratho Posted September 26, 2006 Author Posted September 26, 2006 you mispelled kumo (kimo ) and since your stamina is sealed shouldn't it be 0? It is not totally sealed, I just cant have it lover than 50% of my lowest non "advancement sealed" stat. and thank you for pointing out my spellings errors
DragonOfAnger Posted September 26, 2006 Posted September 26, 2006 you mispelled kumo (kimo ) and since your stamina is sealed shouldn't it be 0? Advancement Seal doesnt work like sealed Genjutsu/Ninjutsu. Advancement Seal means the stat needs to be Half or lower than any non advancement sealed stats. So since Tai and Stamina are 10 (both advancement sealed) the next lowest stat would need to be 20 or more, the lowest other stats he has are speed accuracy and evasion and All of them are 20. Character thereby meets the requirements of Advancement Seal.
