Guest sasukepwnz Posted October 20, 2006 Posted October 20, 2006 (edited) Douton: Bouhimei Rokudenashi (Earth Style: Dungeon of Nothingness) Type: Ninjutsu (Personal to Aburame Edo) Rank: Jounin Cost: 350 chakra; 200 to repair Effects: See effects below. . . -Creates one dome of Earth around the opponent. -Dome has 250 health points. -Takes one setup phase to repair it. -Must make repairs the turn the damage is taken. -When inside the dome may not make any attacks at Edo. (Opponent cant.) -Each turn your inside the dome you lose 10 chakra. Siphoned from the opponent to Edo. -Roll a D10 each turn 1-5 you remain in the dome, 6-10 you may use one technique to attempt to break free. (Must be Jounin level or higher level technique.) -If damage from said technique goes over 250 the dome can not be repaired and must be reconstructed conpletely next turn if you wish. -The character using this technique can not attack while this jutsu is active. Description: Boring his hands into the ground Edo would surge chakra through the succulent soil, in the process he would make a giant dome around his enemy. A dome of soil that would fix itself through Edos chakra and keep the opponent inside and not bale to escape as well. This technique was developed when Edo tried a new element Earth style. He liked it so he continued to use it. Points: 7 Note: I based the repairing cost off of the newly approved armor of sand, so I think they are good =D Edited October 21, 2006 by sasukepwnz
cntrstrk14 Posted October 20, 2006 Posted October 20, 2006 Douton: Bouhimei Rokudenashi (Earth Style: Dungeon of Nothingness) Type: Ninjutsu (Personal to Aburame Edo) Rank: Jounin Cost: 200 chakra; 150 to repair Effects: See effects below. . . -Creates one dome of Earth around the opponent. -Dome has 250 health points. -Takes one setup phase to repair it. -Must make repairs the turn the damage is taken. -When inside the dome may not make any attacks at Edo. (Opponent cant.) -Each turn your inside the dome you lose 10 chakra. Siphoned from the opponent to Edo. -Roll a D10 each turn 1-5 you remain in the dome, 6-10 you may use one technique to attempt to break free. (Must be Jounin level or higher level technique.) Description: Boring his hands into the ground Edo would surge chakra through the succulent soil, in the process he would make a giant dome around his enemy. A dome of soil that would fix itself through Edos chakra and keep the opponent inside and not bale to escape as well. This technique was developed when Edo tried a new element Earth style. He liked it so he continued to use it. Points: 7 Should have some kind of effect that if you go over 250 it cannot be repaired, since it was literally obliterated. Note: I based the repairing cost off of the newly approved armor of sand, so I think they are good =D
Kouta Posted October 21, 2006 Posted October 21, 2006 Ok, I'd like a few reasonings for some of these effects..and other than that...didn't you try to make a nearth armor? So this is just worming aroundthose rules that we said no to, right, then giving benefits? And finally, isn't there already an earth prison jutsu? I thought we were going to go for originality. Other than that....this stuff: -Roll a D10 each turn 1-5 you remain in the dome, 6-10 you may use one technique to attempt to break free. (Must be Jounin level or higher level technique.) Mind explaining why? Why can some turns you not break out, yet some turns you can? -Please note that Jiroubou's dome required his constant attention (his hands had to touch the dome)..so user cannot attack while the dome is active. Aside from that..all those effects are going to make the cost go up..you won't get off for just the base cost and create a tech like that: 200 to originally summon as per your costs..it has 250 HP... A bonus 75 for the "no attacking"... Then a bonus 100 for the "chance decides if you can fight back" plus 25 for the fact that only jounin techs can touch it. Making total cost...400...hmm..seems high..I'll cut to 350, just cuz I'm nice...and cost to repair gets bumped to 200. -------------------------- Enjoy.
cntrstrk14 Posted October 21, 2006 Posted October 21, 2006 I take my original APPROVE sticker and peel it, off, plugging it on top of Kouta's rulings instead ......APPROVE
Takius Posted October 21, 2006 Posted October 21, 2006 Sorry man but I agree with Kouta-- denied until his restrictions are met.
Guest sasukepwnz Posted October 21, 2006 Posted October 21, 2006 (edited) Fixed to Kouta specifications please approve it >_> And kouta No I never tried to make a earth armor >_> Edited October 21, 2006 by sasukepwnz
Takius Posted October 21, 2006 Posted October 21, 2006 ... -Still need to add that user cannot attack while this is active -Also, try to please explain why the targets have a 50% chance of breaking out? Why is it that sometimes they can and sometimes they cannot?
Guest sasukepwnz Posted October 21, 2006 Posted October 21, 2006 Argh fixed the can not attack thing Now for the other things in the anime it took a very powerfulk attack form like all three of them to burst out >_> this is a JOUNIN level technique I think it should have those effects!
cntrstrk14 Posted October 21, 2006 Posted October 21, 2006 *cough* "While the dome drains the occupant's chakra, they have trouble perfuming techniques because of the fluxation in the chakr alevels within their body. Because of this attacks from the occupant have a 50% chance to not materialize, even taijutsu effects as the draining weakens the bodies state." *cough*
Takius Posted October 21, 2006 Posted October 21, 2006 (edited) Yes but that would simply mean that they all have to attack at the same time... not that they randomly have chances of failing to attack... EDIT: Well I guess Cntr's would work... Oh and also please specify in each effect whom it affects; targets or user. Edited October 21, 2006 by Takius
Takius Posted October 21, 2006 Posted October 21, 2006 ::Eh, approved...:: I think Cntr should look over it one more time and then move it. :]
experimental lover Posted October 22, 2006 Posted October 22, 2006 This topic has THREE approvals. Counter and Kouta - He followed their restrictions. Ai - He edited it to match yours as well. It doesn't need another, it just needs to be moved.
