Red Death Posted January 27, 2007 Posted January 27, 2007 (edited) ~Character Sheet~ ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~User Info~ -Username: Red Death -Posting: on weekends -Time Zone: eastern ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~Basics~ Name: Motsumishi, Obara Village: Cloud Allegiance: Kumo Clan: N/A Age: 16 Gender: male ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~Appearance~ -Height: 6'0 -Weight: 148lbs -Hair: Bleach blonde, medium length spikey hair, spikes upward, and downward in the back ( looks like a longer version of Naruto's hair) -Eyes: green eyes -Clothing: Blue pants, has a kunai holster on both legs, has wraps around his waist to his chest, and wears a blue long sleeve shirt. He wears a fat width black headband, in waiting for his fore-head protector. and black ninja shoes. and a blue glove on his rights hand. He wears wraps up to his fore-arms from his knucles on both arms. And an NCIA vest. He has four leather bands about four inches apart going up his sleeve. -Physical Description: He has a normal build, where it looks a little more than fit, and defined, but doesn't look like anything special. and has one scar on his stomach, from playing ninja as a child, but his bandages are always covering it. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~History~ Background: Obara is 6 years old, and at that time most of the children seen their parents go off on ninja missions, or seen someone important leave as a ninja. So most of the kids thought it would be fun to take their parents' ninja gear, and go out into the forest, and play with it. So Obara with his friends Soki, Yumori, and Hiten. Played out there, but didn't necessarily realise how dangerous the "toys," could be. So Soki, ran towards Obara, plunging a kunai into his stomach, missing a vital organ by a third of an inch and he had his eyes closed, so when he dragged the kunai down, it ripped an enormous whole in Obara's stomach. Yumori being a girl screamed at the top of her lungs, and Hiten ran as to not be caught playing with such things. In moments a Chunnin arrived, swept Obara up, and got him to the closest medical nin on the street. She temporarily healed his wound, but still needed to get him to the hospital for blood, and full surgery. In 2 days Obara was admitted out of the hospital. When he got home his Chunnin father, who was known there for being the worst and the oldest chunnin, began yelling at him about "tools" immidiately. Obara didn't listen though, because he was more interested in the "tool" his father was waving at his face. The kunai, the same tool that hospitalized him, now scared him, like a cornered mouse from a cat. But still after a few weeks, his friends and him got together again for some playing ninja, in which they only did taijutsu. Soki, Obara's greatest friend beat all of them, even though they were playing, Obara was taking it seriously, and was furious of the fact that Soki wasn't and he had beaten him at Taijutsu. In a few months it was time for the young ones to be orientated into the academy. Obara was happy to meet his Chunnin teacher. But after about six weeks at the academy, Soki was learning faster and faster leaving Obara in the dust. After a while Obara asked Soki how he was so much stronger, and increasingly getting so much better. And Soki told him that his secret was that, his father was ANBU. And had the ability to help him with techniques, instead of some drop-out Chunnin who probably barely passed the Chunnin exams. Obara was furious that his best friend, had made fun of his father in such a casual manner. So Obara punched Soki with his eyes closed, and after the hit landed, he screamed we are no longer friends, but rival enemies of the same village. When he opened his eyes he found an unharmed Soki smiling. "Noone as weak as you may call themselves my rival, sorry but you must find someone far below my level for that." Soki said harshly. Soki turned around and walked away. That part in Obara's life fueled him for great things, in which afterwards, he began paying three times as much attention to the way the teacher was doing things, and the way, he performed his jutsus. When going behind the house to practice till 2AM from 4PM, he found himself growing stronger and stronger everyday. During his last year at the academy right before his 13th birthday Kumo began invading other countries. At that time, the war front was not at the Kumogakure doorsteps yet. But his father had to leave to help fight. His father after two months of fighting, had lost his life to a new chunnin, from Suna. When they told Obara's family about their loss, Obara could hear them laughing when they began walking away, which only made him angry, where his emotions neaded sadness. He ran out and began training harder and harder everyday, to make sure noone treats him like garbage, because his father was the biggest loser of Kumogakure. He was going to make Kumo realise his family's power. One way or another!!! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~Persona~ Personality: Obara is a simple, ninja who doesn't want to become anything big, he just wants to fight. He is the type of person who only finds true enjoyment on the battle field. He is shy around girls, but can somewhat talk to them without choking on words. He loves to meat new people, and find out about new jutsus that can help him in battles. He doesn't really train at home like most of the other kids. Because usually he helps his mother around the house, while his father is on alert for Kumo. The only times he trains and puts forth a real effort is to learn a new jutsu from the academy faster than his rival Soki. He likes shrimp, and other sea food. and rudely and openly hates the elderly. Wants to fix his father's beaten and battered name Likes: women, seafood, training, and fights Dislikes: loudmouths, immature adults, the elderly ~Favorite~ jutsu training -Food:seafood -Color:blue -Music Genre: soothing sounds of nature -Book Genre: romantic adult -Hangout:training grounds -: ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~Ninja Stats~ Rank: Gennin Level: 15 TXP: 1750 / 250 txp to next level -Stats (out of 2000)- (Health Power) 180 (Stamina) 80 (Chakra) 200 (Taijutsu)120 (Defense)140(+20) (Ninjutsu)300 (Resistance)140 (+20) (Genjutsu) (sealed) (Concentration)0 (Speed) 200 (Accuracy) 400 (Evasion)240 (+20) ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~Skills~ (Checkout the General Skills page. If you are entering the academy do not fill this out yet.) Remaining Skill Points: 3/21 Skills: HINDERING SKILLS: Sealed Genjutsu Cannot use any Genjutsu techniques n/a +2 1 SKILLS: Quick Learner +10% EXP From Missions and Training. EXP given as holiday gifts or handed out from events by the staff are not included in this. n/a -2 1 Ninjutsu Mastery Ninjutsu of your home village element will do an extra +5 damage. This is inclusive of modifiers. n/a -1 10 Second Wind Upon reaching 0 health, user regains 1Hp, but only once per battle. n/a -2 1 Shiva, The Destroyer Offensive Ninjutsu from the user deal an additional 20% damage. This multiplier applies to the base damage of the technique, and in this case and this case only - allows you to break the base damage cap. The taker of this skill may not use Genjutsu. i.e; Damage = 100[base] *1.2 +100[Ninjutsu] = 220, 220 - 100[Resistance] = 120 Damage. n/a -3 1 Chakra Flow Restriction: User may not have any other skill (or bloodline skill) that effects Health, Stamina, or Chakra Regeneration. This skill may not be taught. -10 2 ranks Rank 2: Gain 15% of your Total Chakra every turn. This replaces normal Chakra regeneration. Does not stack with previous ranks. Skills learned from Jounins: ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~Techniques~ (Check out the Technique Page or create your own set for approval. If you are entering the Academy please remove the basic jutsus, you will learn them in the academy.) Remaining Jutsu Points:0 Basic Academy Jutsus: (You start off with these) Bunshin no Jutsu (Clone Technique) Type: Genjutsu Rank: Academy Student Cost: 10 Genjutsu Description: Creates illusionary replicas of the user. They are unable to attack or interact with other objects, but can serve as good distractions. Damage: None Effects: Adds +5 evasion and +5 accuracy for each clone. Once a clone is hit it is destroyed, and the bonuses with it. Name: Henge no Jutsu (Transformation Technique) Type: Genjutsu Rank: Academy Student Cost: 5 Genjutsu Description: Wrap chakra around your body to change your appearance. You can still use the features of the thing you can become, e.g use the claws of a clawed animal, but not to the extent of if you actually were that thing. Damage: None Effects: Change your appearance. Name: Kawarimi no Jutsu (Body Substitute Technique) Type: Ninjutsu Rank: Academy Student Cost: 10 Ninjutsu Description: A lifesaver, and a must-have technique. With this technique, the user is able to swap their body with a nearby object, usually a log, which will take the full force of any incoming blows for them, while they retreat to safe ground or search for an opening. You can only use this 3 times per battle. Damage: None Effects:Evade the next attack aimed at you. You are unable to attack the opponent the turn you use this. You can only use this 3 times per battle. This technique cannot be used to dodge Ninjutsu, Taijutsu or Genjutsu Techniques. Other Jutsus: \ Name: Lightning Type: Spark Blade Type: Ninjutsu Rank: Gennin Cost: 40 Damage: 40 Effects: N/A Description: The user swipes thier hand across the air and a bolt of electricity strikes out and attacks the opponent. JP: 2 Touch and Go (Tachi Kyou Go) Type: Taijutsu (Lightning Strike Style) Rank: Gennin Cost: 30 Damage: 30 Effect:: Ninjutsu is unusable by the target for their next post. This effect only occurs the first two times Tachi Kyou Go is used, whether it connects or not. Description: A swift pass followed by a blow to the back of the head which leaves the opponent dazed from the impact and unable to concentrate temporarily. Points: 2 Beginning (Akebono) Type: Ninjutsu (Cloud) Rank: Gennin Cost: 40 Damage: 20 Effect:: +20 HP to user if this connects. Description: A lash of vapor swipes through the opponent, drawing at their very chakra and essence and lashing back to the user, revitalizing them. Points: 2 Ending (Musubi) Type: Ninjutsu (Cloud) Rank: Gennin Cost: 30 Damage: 50 Effect:: User takes 15 damage when they use this technique. Description: A similar lash as Akebono, this one draws on the energy of the user to inflict more damage though. Points: 2 Shockwave Type: Ninjutsu (Lightning) Rank: Gennin Cost: 60 Damage: 60 Effect:s: N/A Description: You do 3 handseals and you begin to hear an echo-like noise that sounds like it's rumbling horribly. The area around you then turns pure white for half of a second from the lightning rushing toward your opponent. It's a powerful jutsu that is normally taught to new genin of Kumo. Points: 3 Jutsus learned from Jounins: ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~Inventory~ Armor: -Head: -Neck: Kumo- head band -Body: NCIA Vest -Waist: -Forearm(s): -Hand(s): -Thigh(s): -Calve(s): -Feet: Weaponry: -Main Weapon: lv.7 Katana -Sub Weapon: Kunai -Un-equipped Slot one:3 shuriken -Un-equipped Slot two:4 senbon needles -Un-equipped Slot three: 2 kunai -Un-equipped Slot four: -Un-equipped Slot five: -Un-equipped Slot six: -Un-equipped Slot seven: -Un-equipped Slot eight: Items: NCIA: Identification Card Item Type: ID Card Item Slots Taken: -- Description: A laminated identification card, simply a must have when apprehending troublesome and mischievous people within The Empire's realm, no one wants to be accused of falsely impersonating an NCIA officer.. Keeping the peace, the duty of the Ninja Crime and Investigation Agency. This simple card bears the name, passport photo sized picture, and general information of the officer; assigned unit, date of registration, etcetera. Cost: -- ; recieved upon registering with the NCIA. NCIA: Gennin Vest Armor Kind: NCIA Vest Body Placement: Chest Attributes: +20 Defence, +20 Resistance, +20 Evasion. Special: +5 Weapon Slots Description: This all black over-vest is much like a traditional Chuunin vest in appearance. Serves primarily as a uniform so that members of the proud Ninja Crime and Investigation Agency are easily identifiable by the public in general. Above the left breast pocket is the wearers name-tag which also has the emblem of their unit; Kusagakure, Konohagakure, etcetera. Cost: -- ; recieved upon registering with the NCIA. Weapon Type: Katana Size: medium Level: 7 Description: This Katana has a black blade. It is well designed for endurance along with extreme sharpness. The hilt is a snake head with red jewels in the snakes eyes. Cost: 150 -Pouch: 3 Shuriken, 3 Kunai, 4 Senbon Needles. -Items in Vault: Nothing. -Money on hand: $38 Animals: (If you want an animal you may purchase one via the market) ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~Update Log~ Character Approval: (Date, and by whom) Leveled up/Exp Earned: (793 txp) LINK 98 exp 58 TXP 68 TXP 50 TXP ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~Transactions~ (How much money you have spent, when, where, and who approved it) Buy: Black Blade Katana Sell: Reward: Loss: 142 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~Battle Log~ (Practice arena battles don't count. Make sure to link to the topics. Wins: Full-metal Dragon Losses: R4ndom,*2 Draws: ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~Mission Log~ Rank D: Rank C: Rank B: Rank A: Rank S: ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Edited March 21, 2008 by Red Death
r4nd0m Posted January 27, 2007 Posted January 27, 2007 Just put an extra space where the paragraph in your bio and its alright by my standards.
Red Death Posted January 27, 2007 Author Posted January 27, 2007 alrighty.... I fixed wut was up soo far, n if it is alright, how can I make it even better soo that I can get it accepted??
Red Death Posted January 27, 2007 Author Posted January 27, 2007 it is my username...my display name is different....Akatsuki is what I use to log in on
Shades Posted January 27, 2007 Posted January 27, 2007 username Is the display name. while that name is merely your login name.
Rei Posted January 27, 2007 Posted January 27, 2007 being a girl screamed at the top of her lungs That is sexist and stereotypical remark. Are you trying to imply only women heavily scream or something else? And had the ability to help him with techniques, instead of some drop-out Chunnin who probably barely passed the Chunnin exams. Obara was furious that his best friend, had made fun of his father in such a casual manner. Why does Obara assume Soki is referring to his father and the academy teachers? rRemember, The academy is managed by a group of Chuunin whom seldom participant on missions. During his last year at the academy right before his 13th birthday Kumo began invading other countries. Continuum error: The "Kumo War' began two years ago (in-game). because his father was the biggest loser of Kumogakure. Chuunin is a respectable rank that many spend years trying to obtain. Even if his father was killed in the line of duty by a ‘new' Chuunin from Suna he's far from the biggest lower in town. He doesn't really train at home like most of the other kids. Training behind the house is still training at home.
Rilon Posted January 28, 2007 Posted January 28, 2007 (edited) I noticed you sealed your genjutsu. However you also spent technique points on the Negai; Yumi. Since this is a genjutsu technique you won't beable to use it. In essence you're wasting 2 points. Also add the hindering trait "Sealed Genjutsu" to reflect the fact that your Genjutsu is sealed, not only will this make your sheet accurate it will give you another 2 skill points to play with. Edited January 28, 2007 by Rilon
Red Death Posted January 28, 2007 Author Posted January 28, 2007 (edited) That is sexist and stereotypical remark. Are you trying to imply only women heavily scream or something else? Why does Obara assume Soki is referring to his father and the academy teachers? rRemember, The academy is managed by a group of Chuunin whom seldom participant on missions. Continuum error: The “Kumo War’ began two years ago (in-game). Chuunin is a respectable rank that many spend years trying to obtain. Even if his father was killed in the line of duty by a ‘new’ Chuunin from Suna he’s far from the biggest lower in town. Training behind the house is still training at home. FIrst of all not to be rude but, are any of these really something to address??? The girl is like 6 or seven I beleive, at that age I do beleive they do scream quite loudly, without saying anything about women. By reading the sentance before hand, you would understand how Soki was emplying aboput Obara's father. And it said that he was the eldest Chunnin, and worst.....That is why they laughed, otherwise, it really wouldn't matter what rank you were killed by, but the fact that he was such a garbage chunnin. the age factor of the invasion with his current age is fine with that timeline BTW... sorry if I came off as rude... I did not meant to be. Edited January 28, 2007 by Red Death
Rei Posted January 28, 2007 Posted January 28, 2007 Staff are expected to review ever aspect of a character sheet. If we think something is wrong or unfeasible we point it out. Also, you sent a message requesting my approval. If you'd like my approval then everything must be feasible. By reading the sentance before hand, you would understand how Soki was emplying aboput Obara's father It's a poor implication, since very little of Obara's father's history is mentioned before then. And it said that he was the eldest Chunnin, and worst.....That is why they laughed, otherwise, it really wouldn't matter what rank you were killed by, but the fact that he was such a garbage chunnin. I suppose, but I don't see way you pointed out a ‘new' Chuunin from Suna defeated him. Let's see so-so history, stats are in order, and a sexist undertone; I guess it's worth an approval. Shade, Rilon did ya' caught anything I missed?
Shades Posted January 28, 2007 Posted January 28, 2007 other than the NCIA freebies and the additional $125, it looks fine.
Red Death Posted January 28, 2007 Author Posted January 28, 2007 I dont understand ur post, what is NCIA, and what about the $125
Rei Posted January 28, 2007 Posted January 28, 2007 (edited) I dont understand ur post, what is NCIA, and what about the $125 Did you read the link in his post? As a member of the NICA (Kumo's armed forces) your character gains an additional $125. Edited January 28, 2007 by Rei
Red Death Posted January 28, 2007 Author Posted January 28, 2007 soo, do I automatically join or how do I do that??
Shades Posted January 28, 2007 Posted January 28, 2007 Alright: 1.NCIA: Ninja Criminal Investagation Asociation. In other words, the ninja organization of the Kumo Empire. 2.Since you are apart of the NCIA you gain an additional $125 as per this article of the Shinobi's times.
Red Death Posted January 28, 2007 Author Posted January 28, 2007 (edited) soo I guess all i really have to do is get approved!!!! lol! and also how do I show that I am apart of NCIA... do I just add the money and id card somewhere, or wait to get approved Edited January 28, 2007 by Red Death
Shades Posted January 28, 2007 Posted January 28, 2007 you add the money, the I.D. card, and the gennin vest
Red Death Posted January 28, 2007 Author Posted January 28, 2007 Anything else to help my approval go smoother??? It would greatly be appreciated!!!
Rilon Posted January 28, 2007 Posted January 28, 2007 (edited) Remember to add the bonuses of your NCIA vest to your stats, I would suggest putting (+20) next to your evasion, defense and resistance, to represent wearing your vest. Edited January 28, 2007 by Rilon
Rei Posted January 28, 2007 Posted January 28, 2007 Anything else to help my approval go smoother??? It would greatly be appreciated!!! Since I'm the only staff member available, for the time being, I can only suggest waiting for another to sign in.
Red Death Posted January 28, 2007 Author Posted January 28, 2007 did you actually already approve me, because I didn't know if it was like a way of saying that you might approve it.
Rei Posted January 28, 2007 Posted January 28, 2007 It's more or less an approval. Unlike the other staff I don't use colours or ‘fancy' fonts to highly my stamp.
Red Death Posted January 28, 2007 Author Posted January 28, 2007 Oh, okay thanks, because that is what I was wondering about really.
