genjutsu Genin Elemental Genjutsu

[Tw33dle]

Wind Style: Kaze Kunai no Jutsu [Wind Kunai]
Type: Genjutsu [Elemental; Wind] 
Rank: Genin
Cost:  40 Chakra
Damage: 20 Ghost Damage
Effect: Target is inflicted with ‘Staggered’ for one turns. 
Description: The user creates a genjutsu in which the target believes the user sends a gust of wind at them. The wind that the target experiences is known to be as sharp as a kunai. If the genjutsu hits, the target believes they are staggered for a short period.  
JP: 2

 

Smoke Style: Suikomu no Jutsu [Inhale]
Type: Genjutsu [Elemental; Smoke] 
Rank: Genin
Cost:  50 Chakra
Effect: Target is inflicted with "Choking" for 2 turns
Description: After forming several hand seals, the user traps his opponent within a genjutsu where they believe the air around them has been surrounded by smoke. The smoke then becomes thick, causing them to begin choking on the smoke.  
JP: 3

Edited March 16, 2018 by Tw33dle

[PandaMattMatt]

First technique:

Please specify that this deals Ghost damage. You can choose how to do this, I'm a fan of doing it like so:

Ghost Damage: 20

Or you can do it

Damage: 20 Ghost Damage

Which ever is fine, just need to specify! Also, you have a floating s on turn.

 

Second one: 

Unless that last bit of your effect is In addition to the status effect, please remove it for the sake of clarity. Since the status effect itself already tells you what it does, repeating in the effect of the technique can lead to confusion. 

[Tw33dle]

Edits made. 

[PandaMattMatt]

Please change your second technique to say: "Effect: Target is inflicted with "Choking" for 2 turns"

 

The second line is redundant and needs to be removed

[Tw33dle]

1. Ahh, that's what you meant. Made the edits. 

[PandaMattMatt]

Approved

[Yurane]

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