Saiken, Asashi Posted June 16, 2020 Posted June 16, 2020 (edited) Forward Vortex Type: Ninjutsu [Vacuum] Rank: Gennin Cost: 30 Chakra Damage: 10 Effects: Staggered [1] Description: The user creates a powerful vacuum around the subject that forces them to propel towards the user. Points: 2 Vacuum Sweep Type: Ninjutsu [Vacuum] Rank: Gennin Cost: 30 Chakra Damage: 5 Effects: Prone [1] Description: The user creates a vacuum at a subject's feet that causes them to fall prone. Points: 2 Vacuum Aura Type: Ninjutsu [Vacuum | Set Trap] Rank: Gennin Cost: 38 Chakra Effects: This technique targets one ally. Remove one turn of 'Prone' on the target. This can cause the duration of Prone to reach 0. Description: The user fashions a vacuum aura for a subject that negates the prone condition due to strong winds. Points: 2 So, I would like to note the last jutsu Vacuum Aura. I spoke to Princess about it prior to my posting it here, and she said that a jutsu that negates a condition is rough and doesn't have a set cost. Due to the incredible amount of value I've placed in the jutsu, I would love to discuss how I might modify it or if there is any chance of approval at all. It is a simple, straightforward and extremely practical jutsu. I really I hope I can get it approved. Edited June 25, 2020 by Saiken, Asashi
Princess Posted June 22, 2020 Posted June 22, 2020 Three techniques to a thread mate. I advise you to take Negative Sword, Negative Shurien and Vortex Siphon and make a new thread. No one will stamp these while there's so much in one thread. Also, you'll get those boots stamped, are you sure you still want Vacuum Aura? Essentially, you'd be looking at paying 38 per turn to negate prone each turn, which is what this would have to do. There's some room to say 'Hey, I'll be paying for it every turn, whether prone or not, can I get a cost reduction?' and maybe you could, but eh. You likely won't need it. When you move those two negative techniques over to a new thread, I'll critique them, bit of work to do.
Saiken, Asashi Posted June 22, 2020 Author Posted June 22, 2020 Thank you! ^^ The main reason I want vacuum aura is not because of self, but for producing a vacuum aura on a teammate. So the boots would get stamped, the vacuum aura would be for me unless the boots get destroyed, but if I used vacuum aura on a teammate say chuunin or higher, I think it would make the cost worth it.
Princess Posted June 23, 2020 Posted June 23, 2020 My advice? Make it Medical, and change it to be as follows: Quote Vacuum Aura Type: Ninjutsu [Vacuum | Medical] Rank: Gennin Cost: 38 Chakra Effects: This technique targets one ally. The next time that ally would be affected by the status effect 'Prone' over the next 4 turns, reduce the duration of Prone by 1. This can cause the duration of Prone to reach 0. Description: The user fashions a vacuum aura for a subject that negates the prone condition due to strong winds. Points: 2 Nice and clear, doesn't have an X modifier (as that causes JP to explode exponentially) and fits in with the simple costing of status negation, instead of immunity, which is largely uncosted at this stage. The other two are mainsite basic as, easy stamps there. Fix Aura and we can roll this ball.
Cloudnine Posted June 24, 2020 Posted June 24, 2020 First two look good! Vacuum Aura: From what I understand, status effect removals can't be pre-loaded if the target is not currently under that status effect. (Angelic Ward being one of those main-site exceptions.) You can definitely remove an existing case of Prone on an ally though, with suggested wording for the effect below: This technique targets one ally. Remove one turn of 'Prone' on the target. This can cause the duration of Prone to reach 0.
Saiken, Asashi Posted June 25, 2020 Author Posted June 25, 2020 I changed vacuum aura to a set trap and added your effects
Cloudnine Posted June 25, 2020 Posted June 25, 2020 Looks good! Just need Princess with the re-app. Approved
