wolfnin Posted August 7, 2006 Posted August 7, 2006 (edited) Name: Aku Ookami Maaku( Evil wolf Mark) Description: This bloodline appears in 1 out of 75 children that are born in the clan. Those who gain this bloodline, they form a mark on their right hand. The mark is in a shape of a wolf and is colored grey. It is said to be the mark of a curse that was placed upon the clan, when it angered the wolves. The mark is said to give great power to those who have it, but it feeds on the user when used. The mark spreads out through the body taking over it and increasing its speed and power like a wolf. The user is given good defense against melee attacks, but the mark drains the user of accuracy. Requirements: rank 1- must be born into the clan, rank 2-lvl 5, rank 3-chunin, rank 4- junin Cost: 15 chakra to start; 10% chakra to upkeep Rank 1: Description: The mark begins to glow red and spreads up on the arm. As it spread up the arm it spirals around the arm and the markings are flame like. Small black marks appear in every part of the body.The mark begins to increase the user's attack and speed. Effect: The user's taijutsu and speed is increased by 20 and adds +5 to user's basic attack damage. The user's defense is against basic attacks/small weapons is increased by 5 cost:-3 Rank 2: Description: The mark becomes light red and spreads accross the chest, back, and into the left arm. It spirals around the left arm with a flame like design. On the back of the user a symbol of a wolf seems to appear. It increases the user's attack and speed, but it causes the user to miss a little as well. Effect: The user's taijutsu and speed is increased by 40 and adds +15 to user's basic attack damage. The user's defense against basic attack/small weapons is increased by 10. Both effects do not stack up with rank 1. The user's accuracy is decreased by 20%. cost, -3 Rank 3: Description: The mark now spreads up from the shoulders to the head and is dark red. It begins to affect the vision of the user and marks in the different parts of the body begin to grow larger. The wolf symbol on the back becomes more focus and clear. As the mark takes control of the body the speed is increased as well as the taijutsu. The user's vision becomes blurry, but can still see. Effect: User's speed and taijutsu is increased by 60 and adds +25 to user's basic attack damage . User's defense is increased by 15 against basic attacks/small weapon. accuracy is decreased by 35%. Does not stack up with rank 2 Cost: -4 Rank 4: Description: The mark is spread fully throughout the body and is black/silver. Black Chakra can be seen surrounding the user on the outside. The mark takes full control fully enhancing the user's speed and taijutsu. The user's vision is poor, but the user can still see. The user seems to be growling at times and the user's eyes are pure black. Effect: Speed and taijutsu is increased by 80 and adds +35 to basic attack damage . User's defense is increased by 20 against basic attacks/small weapon. accuracy is decreased by 50%. Does not stack up with rank 3 Cost: -5 Edited October 16, 2006 by wolfninja33
Kouta Posted August 7, 2006 Posted August 7, 2006 didn't we go over this already? First off, since it requires no activation, I assume that these are just perma boosts, in which case, we get to slap a big fat denied on it immediately. Nothing can alter the base amount of stats anyone has...
wolfnin Posted August 7, 2006 Author Posted August 7, 2006 I added the cost, so you mean that I have to take off the percentages or what?
Arashi Posted August 8, 2006 Posted August 8, 2006 Rank 1 - Skillpont cost: -5 Rank 2 - -3 Rank 3 - -4 Rank 4 - -6 Open for other suggestions
wolfnin Posted August 8, 2006 Author Posted August 8, 2006 (edited) it can't be chakra..i'll just raise the start thing higher..cuz skillpoints..thats a lot I was thinking maybe a higher chakra starting and using per turn instead of skill Edited August 8, 2006 by wolfninja33
wolfnin Posted October 12, 2006 Author Posted October 12, 2006 I'm ready for this bloodline to be reviewed
Maelstrom Posted October 12, 2006 Posted October 12, 2006 Seems a bit too similar to a cursed seal...Sasuke's cursed seal, to be exact. Might be a problem with getting this approved, however, I'll address the effects anyway... First off, I'd ask that you use a percent of your chakra to pay for the upkeep. Something along the lines of 10% should do nicely. Also, please raise the overall decrease the generally match the increase, or else this will cost a lot more SP.
wolfnin Posted October 12, 2006 Author Posted October 12, 2006 I fixed the effects. Also I changed the description a little
Arashi Posted October 16, 2006 Posted October 16, 2006 Haves to agree with Mael, but meh... Rank 1: Decrease the bonus to basic attacks to 5, and put a cost of -3 on it. Rank 2: Basic attack=15, increase cost to -3 Rank 3: BA= 25 Rank 4: BA= 35 Have I missed something else?
wolfnin Posted October 16, 2006 Author Posted October 16, 2006 Alright the changes have bben made and its done
