Guest shikamaru742 Posted November 5, 2005 Posted November 5, 2005 (edited) ~User Data~ -Username: shikamaru742 -Posting: 5 times a week -Time Zone: Eastern Standard Time ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Name: Garricamaru Saotomai Village: Oto Clan: N/A Age: 12 ~Appearance~ -Height: 4'10" -Weight: 105lbs -Hair Color: Black with a light shade of red. -Eye Color: Dark Green -Clothing: A heavy navy blue sweater with a black t-shirt under, dark green shorts, and sanduru. -Physical Description: A muscular body that any 12 year old boy has, A touch of tan to his white skin, and a scar that starts from above his right eyebrow that goes between the eyes and crosses the nose so it end at his left cheek bone. Story/Background: *pant pant pant* goes Garricamaru while trying to get away from a monster in the Shurokima forest which the 9-tailed demon fox once caused his terrifying destruction. Garricamaru was running and running until he came upon a dead-end. He was so scared he was paralyzed. "DADDY HELP ME!!!!!!!!" he yelled. A shadow goes in front of him and chants” The Blast That Slices The Air!" The shadow was his father and monster was killed. "Daddy thank you so much I....."said Garricamau."Daddy?" Garricamaru's father turns around and looks at him with a malice look in his eyes."hehehe"said his dad.” Daddy what's so funny?” he says. *Pow!* Garricamaru falls 10 ft. away. "Daddy why did you do that that really hurt!" Garricamaru cried.” Because he isn't your father." said a mysterious voice. "What do you mean he's right here in front of me! Of course he's my father!" says Garricamaru. "Sure it's your father's body but not your father's spirit.” says the mysterious voice." What are you talking about?! Show yourself!" says Garricamaru. I will tell you when the time is right along with who I am. But for now..."says the mysterious voice.*teleports Garricamaru to the ninja academy* "train here. When you become stronger I will reveal myself. Until then your father is my apprentace.Hahahahahahahaha!" says the mysterious voice moving farther and farther. " So this is my destiny? So be it.I will train here and save my dad from that mysterious person, but first I have to find my way back home and tell my mom everything that happened." Personality: interactive with people all over the world, and determined on every single mission. Likes: Training his ninja skills, eating ramen, girls, and hanging out. Dislikes: Some people he knows, like the bullies in his school. ~Favorite~ -Food: Ramen -Color: Blue -Music Genre: Rock -Book Genre: Action -Hangout: Anywhere possible. Ninja Stats Level: 0 TXP: 0 -Stats (out of 500)- (Health Power) 100 (Stamina) 60 (Chakra) 80 (Taijutsu) 40 (Defense) 40 (Ninjutsu) 60 (Resistance) 60 (Genjutsu) 20 (Concentration) 40 (Speed) 20 (Accuracy) 20 (Evasion) 40 Skills: Name: Strategist Description: Once a battle, and only once, you may choose to have any one of your attacks become a critical hit for 1.5 times its usual damage. Requirements: n/a +Or-: -3 Rank: 1 Name:Merciful Description:Whenever you would deal the finishing blow in combat to an opponent, you must let them live with one HP left, only applies once a battle. Requirements:n/a +Or-: +1 Rank: 1 Techniques: Basic Academy Jutsus: Name: Bunshin no Jutsu (Clone Technique) Type: Genjutsu Rank: Academy Student Description: Creates an illusionary replica of the user. It is unable to attack or interact with other objects, but can serve as a good distraction. Damage: None Name: Henge no Jutsu (Transformation Technique) Type: Genjutsu Rank: Academy Student Description: Wrap chakra around your body to change your appearance. You can still use the features of the thing you can become, e.g. use the claws of a clawed animal, but not to the extent of if you were that thing. Name: Kawarimi no Jutsu (Body Substitute Technique) Type: Ninjutsu Rank: Academy Student Description: A lifesaver, and a must-have technique. With this technique, the user is able to swap their body with a nearby object, usually a log, which will take the full force of any incoming blows for them, while they retreat to safe ground or search for an opening. You can only use this 3 times per battle. Other Justsus: Disgrace (Chijoku) Type: Taijutsu Rank: Gennin Cost: 45 Stamina Effects: Deals 25 damage. This cannot be blocked. They may NOT use body substitution. Taijutsu bonuses(Martial Artist) do NOT add to this attack. However Taijutsu bonuses can raise the damage UP TO 35. Description: Manipulating sound, you appear behind the opponent. Then, you deliver a crushing blow to their spine. Name: Continuous (Menmentaru) Type: Taijustu Rank: Gennin Cost: 10 per Punch Damage: 10 per punch. (max 5) Effects: N/A Description: Starts off by the user closing in on the opponent while rearing back one of his arms and then letting that arm fly towards the opponent, while this arm is hitting the opponent his other arm is being reared back to strike right after, continues like this until done. Armor: -Head: Village Amulet-Neck: -Body: -Waist: -Forearm(s): -Hand(s): -Thigh(s): -Calve(s): -Feet: Weapons: -Main Weapon: -Sub Weapon: -Un-equipped Slot one: -Un-equipped Slot two: -Un-equipped Slot three: Items-- -Pouch: 3 Shuriken, 3 Kunai, and 4 Needles -Items in Vault: Nothing -Money: 125$ -Money in Vault: 0$ ~Update Log~ Character Approval: November 28,2005 by Iron Wolf Leveled up: (when? link it please) ~Battle Log~ Wins: (against whom?) Losses: (against whom?) Draws: (against whom?) ~Mission Log~ Rank D: Rank C: Rank B: Rank A: Rank S: -------------------- Edited December 27, 2005 by shikamaru742
Cloudnine Posted November 12, 2005 Posted November 12, 2005 First of all nyo, this is the wrong character creation forum. Its the one up higher.
Guest shikamaru742 Posted November 12, 2005 Posted November 12, 2005 First of all nyo, this is the wrong character creation forum. Its the one up higher. <{POST_SNAPBACK}> oops!
Rei Posted November 12, 2005 Posted November 12, 2005 (edited) This part of the fourm is no longer active. Please create a character for the stat bassed RPG. Edited November 12, 2005 by Rei
Guest Fu Xi Posted November 12, 2005 Posted November 12, 2005 Flaming spam deleted. Moving topic to the appropriate area. -You havent picked any skills. -You still have two jutsus to choose from the gennin list. -How can you dislike Zabuza(which you spelt incorrectly)? He doesnt exsist. -Your parents dying thing..... very VERY old...... 300+ character sheets had the same thing. Your parents DONT HAVE TO DIE in order for you to become a ninja. Look at Hinata. Look at Sakura. Look at Shikamaru. DONT KILL your parents off or you will NEVER get my approval.
Rei Posted November 12, 2005 Posted November 12, 2005 Personality: Funny,cool,and determined Do not descire your character as "Cool", "Tuff", "Bad' or any of those other slange words that make your "pouplar". What you tihnk is cool, won't be the same for me or another character.
Guest shikamaru742 Posted November 13, 2005 Posted November 13, 2005 Flaming spam deleted.Moving topic to the appropriate area. -You havent picked any skills. -You still have two jutsus to choose from the gennin list. -How can you dislike Zabuza(which you spelt incorrectly)? He doesnt exsist. -Your parents dying thing..... very VERY old...... 300+ character sheets had the same thing. Your parents DONT HAVE TO DIE in order for you to become a ninja. Look at Hinata. Look at Sakura. Look at Shikamaru. DONT KILL your parents off or you will NEVER get my approval. <{POST_SNAPBACK}> Thank you very much for helping me unlike Lemon.
Rei Posted November 13, 2005 Posted November 13, 2005 Sword of a Dragon's Soul Denided. Has yet to be created and you're yet to pay for this.
Guest shikamaru742 Posted November 13, 2005 Posted November 13, 2005 (edited) Flaming spam deleted.Moving topic to the appropriate area. -You havent picked any skills. -You still have two jutsus to choose from the gennin list. -How can you dislike Zabuza(which you spelt incorrectly)? He doesnt exsist. -Your parents dying thing..... very VERY old...... 300+ character sheets had the same thing. Your parents DONT HAVE TO DIE in order for you to become a ninja. Look at Hinata. Look at Sakura. Look at Shikamaru. DONT KILL your parents off or you will NEVER get my approval. <{POST_SNAPBACK}> uh please delete this exact reply-but not yours Edited November 13, 2005 by shikamaru742
Guest Tao Posted November 13, 2005 Posted November 13, 2005 (edited) and please add stats as well. there manditory if you want a char. Zazuba? ZABUZA.. and the bio..i think you should just start all over for it, how its typed and the grammar..is just no. Edited November 13, 2005 by Draseri
Guest sasukepwnz Posted November 13, 2005 Posted November 13, 2005 Do what Draseri said and then also, your allowed to have 2 jutsu fro gennin for your village, unless you take the skill subtle elements, but your allwoed to have 2 Oto jutsu besides the justu from the academy, also i agree with draseri on this one the background, i would start over, no one likes when the parents die, cause everyone does that, so i would scrap the back ground and do another one, and for the weapon, if you want that weapon, you have to post it in the weapon creations forum, and then get it apporved, and pay for it, you dont get weapons for free. Just some advice from a fellow member.
Guest Enishi Posted November 13, 2005 Posted November 13, 2005 List of Problems: 1) Seeing as how your character is not part of a clan, please place "N/A" in the Clan section. 2) Zabuza has been long dead and the parent's death is so......cliché. Remove it. 3) I don't believe Shonen Jump exists in the Naruto world. 4) You need to take two gennin jutsus. 5) You're missing the stat points. 6) Remove the Gauntlets and the "Sword of a Dragon's Soul". If you really want them, you have to create them in the Weapon/Armour Creation Forum and purchase them. Chance of Approval (New Feature): 0%
Ironwolf Posted November 25, 2005 Posted November 25, 2005 Okay, I do not know why you thought I would approve this when you haven't done anything you were told to, change it or you will never get this character into the player area.
Kitai Tenshi Posted November 26, 2005 Posted November 26, 2005 Well to go with what Iron said and what Enishi said. You need to put your stats in. Thats all the health, stamina,and chakra stuff. I'm glad to see you changed your background. I think you can go a liitle more indepth but i think it will work. So only thing i can see thats left to put in is your stats. Put those in then PM a mod/admin and you should start getting apporvals. p.s. make sure your stats are multiples of 20, unless its Health, Stamin, Chakra, or Speed. This will make it easier on you later when you start fighting people.
Guest shikamaru742 Posted November 27, 2005 Posted November 27, 2005 thank you all(exept Lemon)for your help i have fixed my character sheet so what do you think of it now.
Rei Posted November 27, 2005 Posted November 27, 2005 (edited) Do you know the exchange rate of currency? 100,000 yen would equal $ 836.260 US; easily a bank load can be taken out for this amount of money. As far as I know there's no free health Care in the Naruto world, so who's paying for his five year hospital bill? That alone would come up to money then 100,000 yen. We don't use yen on Ninja Academy; we deal with dollars or a sum of money equal to that. Poorly written history to say the least. Personality: a Nut-case,interactive,and determined Details please. Edited November 27, 2005 by Rei
Guest shikamaru742 Posted November 27, 2005 Posted November 27, 2005 Do you know the exchange rate of currency? 100,000 yen would equal $ 836.260 US; easily a bank load can be taken out for this amount of money. As far as I know there's no free health Care in the Naruto world, so who's paying for his five year hospital bill? That alone would come up to money then 100,000 yen. We don't use yen on Ninja Academy; we deal with dollars or a sum of money equal to that. Poorly written history to say the least. Details please. <{POST_SNAPBACK}> Thank you i have fixed the problem. What do you think now?
Rei Posted November 27, 2005 Posted November 27, 2005 History is poorly written to say the least. You've yet to explain who bill is paying his father's bill for the next five years; some bills could be up to and including $5,000 a day; that's about 9,125,000 in five years.
Guest shikamaru742 Posted November 28, 2005 Posted November 28, 2005 History is poorly written to say the least. You've yet to explain who bill is paying his father's bill for the next five years; some bills could be up to and including $5,000 a day; that's about 9,125,000 in five years. <{POST_SNAPBACK}> Done what do you think now can it get approved?
Ironwolf Posted November 28, 2005 Posted November 28, 2005 Okay, run the whole thing through a spell checker first, because it is really hard to read. Second, the entire purpose of the background is to tell us how and why you wanted to become a ninja, please make it more engaging than it is.
Guest shikamaru742 Posted November 28, 2005 Posted November 28, 2005 (edited) Okay, run the whole thing through a spell checker first, because it is really hard to read. Second, the entire purpose of the background is to tell us how and why you wanted to become a ninja, please make it more engaging than it is. <{POST_SNAPBACK}> Done so what do you guys think now? Edited November 28, 2005 by shikamaru742
Kitai Tenshi Posted November 28, 2005 Posted November 28, 2005 Lets see here. you have no skills. You have 2 more jutsu's instead. please select the two jutsu's you want. Then put in some skills. These are located on the .com page HERE. After doing this then contact a mod/admin and ask for approval.
Ironwolf Posted November 29, 2005 Posted November 29, 2005 (edited) You have two too many jutsu's, I thank Cronus for catching that. EDIT: Approved Edited November 29, 2005 by Ironwolf
Kitai Tenshi Posted November 29, 2005 Posted November 29, 2005 Hey ironwolf check his skills again hes at a -3 total right now. He needs to get rid of the -3 skill or take on a +3 hindering skill.
Guest shikamaru742 Posted November 29, 2005 Posted November 29, 2005 Hey ironwolf check his skills again hes at a -3 total right now. He needs to get rid of the -3 skill or take on a +3 hindering skill. <{POST_SNAPBACK}> did it last night.
