Guest Ichi-kun Posted March 21, 2006 Posted March 21, 2006 (edited) Name: Water Typhoon (Mizu Taifuu no Jutsu) Type: Ninjutsu Rank: Gennin Cost: 40 Damage: 35/45 Requirments: Blended Color (Mizu & Kaze) required. Effects: If near a source of water this jutsu causes 45 damage instead of 35. Description: Using chakra the user Creates a large water Typhoon that smashes into the enemy. Looks like a large tornado of water. Name: Water Armor (Mizu Yoroi no Jutsu) Type: Ninjutsu Rank: Gennin Cost: x Damage: N/A Effects: Effects: When receiving damage the user may pay x chakra in the response phase to prevent 2x damage caused by the opponent, this is when near a source of water. (i.e 1 chakra prevents 2 damage). If not near a source of water the user pays 2 chakra to prevent 1 damage. This jutsu is ineffective against non gennin level techniques. If enemy uses electric based attacks their damage is doubled based on water as a conductor, this being one of its weakness. Description: Mixing their chakra with water the user creates a dense liquid which covers their entire body. This technique allows for a great defence due to the dense nature of the chakra containing water that covers the users. Name: Hurricane Ice Storm (Shippuu Aisu Arashi no Jutsu) Type: Ninjutsu Rank: Gennin Cost: 50 Damage: 45/60 Effects: When used near a source of water this jutsu causes 60 damage instead of 45. Subtle element: wind is a requisit Description:User blends water and win elements to create a wind storm. Water then rises above enemies head and rains down on them, but turns to ice to create deadly ice spikes that shower the enemy. When near a large water source the damage gets larger based on the amount of water. (i.e. More ice shards) If user has enough chakra they can use their own chakra and direct the ice more accurately. Edited March 23, 2006 by Ichigo
shinobi523 Posted March 22, 2006 Posted March 22, 2006 Give them some better descriptions and maby bonus damge for when you are near water. I say this because you just say they work better near water but don't give them any effects.
Prophet Posted March 22, 2006 Posted March 22, 2006 (edited) If you could put some stat effects saying what the armor does that would be great. As soon as these get approved I wouldn't mind learning them if you don't mind...I also agree w/ damage bonus if near water or if it's raining. *Great Rain no jutsu* Also does one need subtle elements wind for that last tech? Edited March 22, 2006 by Prophet
Guest Ichi-kun Posted March 22, 2006 Posted March 22, 2006 (edited) I think you do, but I have it lol. Also fixed up some of the Effects and stuff lol. Edited March 22, 2006 by Ichigo
Prophet Posted March 22, 2006 Posted March 22, 2006 (edited) In that case you should add in that you need that skill otherwise people can just take it without it. Also actually put some stat #'s in the effect of the armor. Simply saying it "stops most basic attacks" and "baasic genjutsu" doesn't tell us very much. If I wanted to I could read that as meaning any Gennin level Taijutsu attacks/techniques. You see what I mean? Other then that, one quick point about ur Hyrdo Typhoon. It says opponent is stunned for a few seconds. By that do you mean the Stunned effect? Because that majorly affects the chakra cost. Love the idea though and once you get it approved I wouldn't mind ur permission to learn them. Edited March 22, 2006 by Prophet
Guest Azrael Posted March 22, 2006 Posted March 22, 2006 (edited) OK how bout this: Name: Water Typhoon (Mizu Taifuu no Jutsu) Type: Ninjutsu Rank: Gennin Cost: 40 Damage: 35/50 Effects: If near a source of water this jutsu causes 50 damage instead of 35 Name: Water Armor (Mizu Yoroi no Jutsu) Type: Ninjutsu Rank: Gennin Cost: x Damage: N/A Effects: When receiving damage the user may pay x chakra in the response phase to prevent 2x damage caused by the opponent, this is when near a source of water. (i.e 1 chakra prevents 2 damage). If not near a source of water the user pays 2 chakra to prevent 1 damage. This jutsu is ineffective against non gennin level techniques. Description: Mixing their chakra with water the user creates a dense liquid which covers their entire body. This technique allows for a great defence due to the dense nature of the chakra containing water that covers the users body. Name: Hurricane Ice Storm (Shippuu Aisu Arashi no Jutsu) Type: Ninjutsu Rank: Gennin Cost: 50 Damage: 45/60 Effects: When used near a source of water this jutsu causes 60 damage instead of 45. Edited March 22, 2006 by Azrael
Kouta Posted March 22, 2006 Posted March 22, 2006 Er Hm..the official modmin checklist: -State a specific number of turns to be stunned...that will modify chakra costs. -All techniques need descriptions..you can't leave that out. -How does water stop attacks? I don't yet get that...and if you are trying to copy the Suna Yoroi..which, by the way, you are...it has to be Chunnin..have a good as hell deescription, and THEN I'll murder it without abandon. -No genin jutsu EVER does more than 60..its called a damage cap....you gotta follow that rule too.
Guest Azrael Posted March 22, 2006 Posted March 22, 2006 maybe the ideas i came up with for ichigo might be more acceptable? just trying to help =D
Prophet Posted March 22, 2006 Posted March 22, 2006 Agreed. That makes a lot more sense and stills achieves his desired effects.
Guest Ichi-kun Posted March 23, 2006 Posted March 23, 2006 Alright I tweaked them a bit and added your suggestions, thanks for the help lol.
Guest Azrael Posted March 23, 2006 Posted March 23, 2006 you not changing water armour bcos as it it is its pants tbh and actually does nothing.
Guest Ichi-kun Posted March 23, 2006 Posted March 23, 2006 There, I used your effects of it, I thought I changed it in the first place but I must have screwed that up lol.
Guest Azrael Posted March 23, 2006 Posted March 23, 2006 cool.. btw sort the cost of the jutsu to x. You have left it as it was before. =D just helping.
Guest Ichi-kun Posted March 23, 2006 Posted March 23, 2006 Lol, I do like your help by the way, and I fixed it lol.
Guest Azrael Posted March 23, 2006 Posted March 23, 2006 cool and the help is no problem at all =D if you have any other techs you want help with I'll aid but I am far from the bst person to apporach regarding jutsu creation tbh lol
Arashi Posted March 23, 2006 Posted March 23, 2006 Water Typhoon (Mizu Taifuu no Jutsu) - Change the damage to 35/45, cuz' 50 is too much. Also needs a describtion, as Kouta said. Water Armor (Mizu Yoroi no Jutsu) - Kouta made a good point on this one. How could this i.e. protect against electric attacks? Hurricane Ice Storm (Shippuu Aisu Arashi no Jutsu) - If subtle element:wind is a requisit, then it's fine, otherwise, lower it it 45/55
Guest Ichi-kun Posted March 23, 2006 Posted March 23, 2006 Fixed what you asked for, hopefully its better now.
Prophet Posted March 23, 2006 Posted March 23, 2006 Wow...See what a little quick editing does? Now these techs are way cool and at the same time are clear and easy to understand. Start PMing some mods and admins ASAP to get this approved because I could sure do with learning that armor technique. Non-mod Approval no Jutsu.
Guest Azrael Posted March 23, 2006 Posted March 23, 2006 see wif some mod changes ll is alot better... like i said i can help but aint as good as others... =D but i approve of ur techs now.. tey are clear and make sense... well done!
Ironwolf Posted March 23, 2006 Posted March 23, 2006 (edited) My sugestion is to give the Typhoon jutsu a Blended Color (Mizu & Kaze) requirement...which you have, I've seen your sheet, but it still needs to be there. <edit> Approval No Jutsu </edit> Edited March 23, 2006 by Ironwolf
