TheLastYuriSamurai Posted January 17, 2022 Share Posted January 17, 2022 (edited) Medical Arts: Demonic Healing I | Iryō Ninjutsu: Akuma Chiyu I| 悪魔 治癒 I Type: Genjutsu [Konoha Medical Corps] Rank: Gennin Cost: 60 chakra Damage: 20 Ghost Damage Effects: Afraid: 2 [1] Description: During a medical ninja’s training they learn the way the body works and how to correct damage. This technique shows that process in reverse, horrifying opponents with the visceral illusion of their body experiencing forced surgery. Learned via medical training via the Konoha Medical Corps. JP: 3 Medical Arts: Demonic Healing II | Iryō Ninjutsu: Akuma Chiyu II| 悪魔 治癒 II Type: Genjutsu [Konoha Medical Corps] Rank: Chuunin Cost: 108 Chakra Damage: 60 Ghost Damage Effects: Afraid: 3 [1] Description: During a medical ninja’s training they learn the way the body works and how to correct damage. This technique shows that process in reverse, horrifying opponents with the visceral illusion of their body experiencing forced surgery. Learned via medical training via the Konoha Medical Corps. JP: 4 Medical Arts: Demonic Healing III | Iryō Ninjutsu: Akuma Chiyu III| 悪魔 治癒 III Type: Genjutsu [Konoha Medical Corps] Rank: Jounin Cost: 173 Chakra Damage: 140 Ghost Damage Effects: Afraid: 4 [1] Description: During a medical ninja’s training they learn the way the body works and how to correct damage. This technique shows that process in reverse, horrifying opponents with the visceral illusion of their body experiencing forced surgery. Learned via medical training via the Konoha Medical Corps. JP: 5 Here's the first batch of techniques I was hoping to have for the medic organization I was hoping to create one day. Please let me know if I need to clean anything up (or if it seems like a horrific idea haha)! Edited January 29, 2022 by TheLastYuriSamurai updating! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Princess Posted January 17, 2022 Share Posted January 17, 2022 So, similar issues to the other thread, your layout needs a bit of work. But, also, you're looking to use Afraid, a complicated status effect that requires both levels and duration. Fun fun. I can work out what you meant from the cost, so I'll sort it out. Also, Medical jutsu MUST be ninjutsu. It could be a Genjutsu/Ninjutsu hybrid, sure, but if it is medical is must be ninjutsu. Honestly though? This could be done as pure ninjutsu which would be mechanically no different and significantly less complex. See, if you want that 20 damage, and you're making this genjutsu, you have to decide what it uses to hit, and thus what damage it deals, physical or ghost. Genjutsu cannot deal normal damage, and instead have a whole separate mechanic for combat. So I will be rewriting these as a hybrid, but then I suggest you go and look into genjutsu archetypes if you really want these to be genjutsu, or change them to pure nin. Meditative is good. Your costs are also off for the later jutsu, as you're looking at the medical damage ratios, which you don't use if you're using genjutsu for damage which is the entire point of a medical nin/gen hybrid. Medical Arts: Demonic Healing I | Iryō Ninjutsu: Akuma Chiyu I| 悪魔 治癒 I Type: Ninjutsu | Genjutsu [Hybrid | Medical | Konoha Medical Corps] Rank: Gennin Cost: 60 chakra Damage: 20 Ghost Damage Effects: Afraid: 2 [1], this attack uses Concentration to Hit and Dodge. Description: During a medical ninja’s training they learn the way the body works and how to correct damage. This technique shows that process in reverse, horrifying opponents with the visceral illusion of their body experiencing forced surgery JP: 3 Medical Arts: Demonic Healing II | Iryō Ninjutsu: Akuma Chiyu II| 悪魔 治癒 II Type: Ninjutsu | Genjutsu [Hybrid | Medical | Konoha Medical Corps] Rank: Chuunin Cost: 108 Chakra Damage: 60 Ghost Damage Effects: Afraid: 1 [1] Description: During a medical ninja’s training they learn the way the body works and how to correct damage. This technique shows that process in reverse, horrifying opponents with the visceral illusion of their body experiencing forced surgery. JP: 4 Medical Arts: Demonic Healing III | Iryō Ninjutsu: Akuma Chiyu III| 悪魔 治癒 III Type: Ninjutsu | Genjutsu [Hybrid | Medical | Konoha Medical Corps] Rank: Jounin Cost: 173 Damage: 140 Ghost Damage Effects: Afraid: 4 [1] Description: During a medical ninja’s training they learn the way the body works and how to correct damage. This technique shows that process in reverse, horrifying opponents with the visceral illusion of their body experiencing forced surgery. JP: 5 Now, I'll note while you said longer durations in your skills for afraid, the descriptions you slammed in the middle though referenced the higher level version of afraid, not the longer versions. Now, I figured you wanted the levels over the turns, but you can do both, it just increases the cost significantly. So say your jounin one, if you want 3 turns of level 4 afraid (the most you can have), that costs not 80 chakra, but 240 chakra, which then you add the damage to and your jutsu becomes very expensive. So up to you. Also, these are the genjutsu damage ratios that were used: • Gennin [ 1:1 ] — Maximum 60 base ghost damage • Chuunin [ 4:5 ] — Maximum 90 base ghost damage • Jounin [ 2:3 ] — Maximum 270 base ghost damage Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PandaMattMatt Posted January 27, 2022 Share Posted January 27, 2022 Hi! I'm PandaMattMatt, resident Medical expert (I wrote the Medical system as it exists in it's current form). I also happen to have a character (Hanamajo Junsei) who is a Medic and Genjutsu specialist! So when I saw these I wanted to pop in and see what was up. I suggest dropping the Medical tag entirely and just going for "learned via medical training" flavor. Speaking from a standpoint of Flavor, you can drop the medic tag and make them exclusively Genjutsu, but keep the "Medical Arts; Demonic Healing" title and description. You can even keep the Source Requirement of "Konoha Medical Corps"! The benefits to this is that these Genjutsu can have their cost reduced with the right skills (Inner calm, Genjutsu Magnifier, etc) and would actually save you 1 jp on each iteration. Any technique with a medical tag cannot ever have it's chakra cost reduced by any means, a part of making medical stuff balanced. Nothing I see in these techniques would necessitate being a medical tag either, aside from your flavor. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheLastYuriSamurai Posted January 29, 2022 Author Share Posted January 29, 2022 Thank you both so much, I think this iteration might be approvable. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Princess Posted January 29, 2022 Share Posted January 29, 2022 1 and 3 are Approved. For 2, you've costed it as Afraid: 3 [1] but written it as Afraid: 1 [1]. So either you're over paying by 40, or I suspect, it's a typo. Fix that and yes this can get a stamp. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheLastYuriSamurai Posted January 29, 2022 Author Share Posted January 29, 2022 Fixed! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Princess Posted January 29, 2022 Share Posted January 29, 2022 Approved! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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