Sol Pope

So with Stinging Tendril the line "The attribute 'Poisoned Weapon' may now be applied to attacks made with this weapon." has me a little confused. That's already an attribute that can be added to weapons is there a restriction I am missing that wouldn't have allowed you to use it? Before I move forward with approving it I just want to get on the same page with what you're trying for here to make sure I'm not overlooking something glaring.

Approved

Approved

Moved to dead on creator's request

Approved

I could either see having a chakra cost associated with it being good or having the skill cost be higher up front and associate the negation amount to ninja rank. 1 at genin/chunin and 1 at jonin/sennin or similar. With the latter I think it could probably come down a little in cost as well.

I'm gonna rescind my now deleted previous comment. I'm curious what other approval staff think but I'm gonna slap this with it's first approval. Approved

Changed made and Approved

Changes made and Approved

Approved

Approved

Same problem here as with the level 3

Harpy's Sting is approved as Banshee's Sting. Mechanically it's sound but the names are wrong. Rippling sting is approved as Namisasu | Rippling Sting | 波刺す Type: Genjutsu/Ninjutsu [Meditative Archetype | Collapse] Rank: Chuunin Cost: 84 Chakra Effects: Poison; 50 [2]. Afraid; 1 [1]. This attack uses Accuracy and Evasion to hit. Description: A potent sting which carries with it the true terror of facing the Irukandji summons, the combination of incredible pain and creeping terror that is the dawn of Irukandji Syndrome. Though only a small dose, repeated exposure can be fatal. Points: 4 and you have it here on the page as Rippling Sting Type: Genjutsu/Ninjutsu [Meditative Archetype | Collapse] Rank: Chuunin Cost: 103 Chakra Effects: Poison; 50 [2]. Afraid; 1 [1]. This attack uses Accuracy and Evasion to hit. Description: One of the most terrifying attacks the Irukandji can launch. Whereas often it is only a small fragment of the swarm attacking, with this assault the entire swarm move as one, aiming to inflict as many stings as possible in as short a time as possible. Should even a fraction of these stings land, the buildup of toxins in the system is catastrophic, causing severe tissue degeneration and vastly amplifying the horrifying effects of the Irukandji Syndome. Points: 6

Everything looks to be on order! Approved

Approved

Yep yep yep

Ok I’m going to go down the line with these and point out the inconsistencies with our system. All 3: Prereqs for learning jutsu are, to my knowledge, something you would make a skill for. What these other jutsu should have is a Condition. That condition being “Have at least one helation on the battlefield” or something similar. Helation: We don’t have a mechanism for learning a technique multiple times that I’m aware of. Furthermore the ‘effect’ is something that can basically go in the description of the jutsu. As written, this jutsu doesn’t do anything. Based on the following two techniques, I have a feeling that you want to start building a system similar to the mainsite Hotaru | Firefly jutsus. Creating disks and then using them in later phases for increasing effects. I will paste the Firefly jutsu here as an example in a spoiler. You will want these constructs to have a name, even if they cannot be interacted with by anyone but your own techniques. Hard Light: This jutsu also doesn’t have a mechanical effect within our battle system. Some jutsu have what we call an “RP effect” that is added to them to allow you to do interesting things with your jutsu outside of battle. That said, using your jutsu within a logical frame of reference is generally good enough. If you merely want to use a jutsu for carrying things, you can do that within reason without getting a specific role play only technique approved. Edge of Afterglow: Increasing the cost based on rings you have/want to use is legit and also how the Hotaru jutsu work. That said, you will want the damage/effects to reflect this as well. My assumption is that you want to pay 30 for each ring you have and then each of those will deal the 30 damage. In that case you will want both the cost and the damage to be “30x” and clarify what “x” is in the cost like you have. If you indeed want to do it this way, you should also have a clause in the effect that states that the damage cannot exceed the genin damage cap (which is 60). All in all I am pleased with the effort you’re putting in. The system can be confusing at first and discerning between what are effects and what are descriptions trips lots of people up. If you have any questions you can post them below or directly message me here on the forum or on discord, I’m always happy to help! Edited to add: The Jutsu example Saiken posted below yours is closer to the effect I assumed you were going for with Edge of Afterglow. That said, AoE jutsu have specific cost increase rules that weren't followed and is undercosted as creation of the constructs would need their own cost on top of what you're paying for damage. (AoE jutsu cost 3 times as much chakra to do the same damage as a single target, or 4 times more if you only want it to target enemies) I also just noticed that the Firefly techs I used as an example are dynamic traps. Please don't try to emulate this specific portion of the jutsu, they are main site legacy techs that need to be updated. Dynamic Traps have much stricter conditions nowadays. :)

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Designers Notes: These items are equivalent to the promotion vests given at rank increase in terms of stat increases. On top of this they have a once per battle use whilst disengaging combat. I went back and forth between a couple effects that dealt with these new rules and landed here. Critique is welcome, I know this system has not seen any "live tests" and so I don't want to create something that's trivializing it.

Cloak of White Roses +40 Evasion, +40 Ninjutsu, +15 Item Slots Scattering of the White Rose: Once per battle, when the user is in the process of ‘Disengaging’ combat, they may roll twice against their Pursuit Challenge and take the higher of the two rolls. Cost: Free for members of The Ishikawa Syndicate, Chunin Rank and membership in the Order of the White Rose, Replaces the standard chunin vest Cloak of Red Roses +80 Evasion, +80 Ninjutsu, +25 Item Slots Scattering of the Red Rose: Once per battle, when the user is in the process of ‘Disengaging’ combat, they may roll twice against their Pursuit Challenge and take the higher of the two rolls. Cost: 150 RP with The Ishikawa Syndicate, Jonin Rank and membership in the Order of the Red Rose, Replaces the standard jonin vest Cloak of Black Roses +120 Evasion, +120 Ninjutsu, +35 Item Slots Scattering of the Black Rose: Once per battle, when the user is in the process of ‘Disengaging’ combat, they may roll twice against their Pursuit Challenge and take the higher of the two rolls. Cost: 300 RP with The Ishikawa Syndicate, Membership in the Order of the Black Rose

Shaizi buys main site item - [Addictive Item | Fire Mist Cigarette] Rank 3 x2 This Item is "Addictive; 3" to be used with the Hindering Skill, "Addiction". Money on hand: $285 Cost: $120 Money remaining: $165

I feel like the regen on the vests is probably a little too strong. I'd like to see it not be able to stack with other forms of advanced regen/be lowered/stack to a certain max rate. As it is, the jonin vest is essentially paying 1200 ryo for a stronger chakra flow. 5 SP+ a little more worth of effect seems a little much to me.

Critical Focus: should be reworded to better reflect the wording on the mainsite. I assume you are meaning for this to work with Puppet Weapon Attacks and Puppet Weapon Techniques? As puppets are themselves weapons I'm not 100% sure what you want this to effect. I would price this at $500 if you're restricting it to Puppet Weapon Attacks and Puppet Weapon Techniques (both which require the Armanent Puppet Parts). Otherwise it'll need to be higher. Reaper's Gotta Reap: I would probably price this at $800

I feel that these skills are approvable with the changes. Approved

I think the Chakra Leak change is an elegant solution to the issues KC brought up. If he thinks it's an acceptable change I would be willing to approve this in that state.