Kassiel Posted July 8, 2007 Posted July 8, 2007 (edited) ~User Data~ -Username: Kassiel -Posting: Every day -Time Zone: Pacific Standard Time ~Basics~ Name: Senuskai Kassiel Village: Kumogakure Clan: Senuskai Senuskai homepage Allegiance: Resistance Age: 15 Gender: Male ~Appearance~ -Height: 5' 6" -Weight: 126lbs. -Hair Color: Silver -Eye Color: Ice Blue -Clothing: He wears a silver long-sleeved shirt with his clan emblem on the back (similar to Shikimaru's in design.) Long plain black pants, and a Kirigakure headband, usually around his neck. -Physical Description: He stands nearly six feet tall on a pale, wiry frame. He has a paw mark on his right arm, just below the elbow. A long thin scar, barely visible against his skin runs down from his left ear to the base of his jaw. ~History~ Background: When the civil unrest that ravaged the Senuskai clan flared up, Kassiel was separated from his parents. He made his way into the forest,and wandered around for several weeks, eating just enough to survive. One day, near dawn, he stumbled upon a great den full of wolves, and collapsed. When he awoke, the wolves welcomed him, seeing that he was Senuskai. He stayed there for 9 days, and he joined the wolf pack, as the ninja of old had done. In the eight years that he was a member of the pack, he learned many things, and he picked up a strong sense of pack mentality. He learned to hunt and fight using, not power, but speed and cunning. He especially bonded with a great silver wolf named Osore when he was six, from the day they met, they were inseperable. As he grew older, he became more and more absorbed in the pack, and the pack elders grew more anxious about telling him his heritage. One day, while wandering through the forest, Kassiel and and osore ran upon two enemy pack members, and were forced to flee. He and Osore rediscovered the village when they were running. They came to the walls but went no further. Kassiel was about nine, and dared not enter for not knowing what it was. When he reported his discovery, the pack elders told him the history of his clan. At first, he refused to believe this but gave in after a while. He did not enter the village for three years after that, and when he did, he immediately began searching for relatives. When he found them, they refused to believe it was him, despite Osore's recollection of events. He slept outside for nearly a month, not caring whether he live or died, lashing out at anything that moved , and was kicked around by NCIA members. He entered the academy soon after, at the age of 12. He first learned of the resistance in the academy when they were learning history. He idealized them and decided to join. He traveled for four months to get to Kirigakure and he joined the resistance there. He entered the academy there, he didn't understand things very well at first, and didn't speak well, but when he learned how to read, he began picking it up immediately. He's looking forward to being assigned to a squad and proving himself to his newfound home. When he graduated, he wished his family was there, but there was nothing he could do about that so he was content. This is my story he thought to himself. ~Persona~ Personality: Kassiel is a very quiet person, some might call him antisocial. He's still very sad about his parents refusing him, and he's quick to anger if any of his friends are hurt, physically or mentally by others. When he got back to the village, he was kicked around by NCIA members while on the streets, so when he moved to Kirigakure, he made himself an avid member of the resistance. He holds a strong mistrust for people whom he has just met, until they prove their loyalty to him. He has very few friends, and doesn't speak well(for obvious reasons) but the few friends that he has, he is feircely loyal to, and would not betray for anything. Likes: Meat, Reading, playing mind games with the other ninja. Dislikes: Cats (the feeling is mutual), Loud Noises, Vegetables. ~Favorite~ -Food: Steak -Color: Green -Music Genre: Orchestra -Book Genre: Fantasy -Hangout: The training grounds Ninja Stats Rank: Genin Level: 0 TXP: 0 -Stats (out of 500)- (Health Power) 60 (Stamina) 50 (Chakra) 50 (Taijutsu) 40 (Defense) 40 (Ninjutsu) 40 (Resistance) 20 (Genjutsu) 20 (Concentration) 40 (Speed) 60 (Accuracy) 40 (Evasion) 40 ~Skills~ Remaining Skill Points: 0 Skills: Positive: Skill Name: Wolf Soul Chakra Bloodline: Clan Skill Description: Many ninjas of the Senuskai clan, do not know about the wolf inside them. Some ninjas that are able to acess that chakra have great power. After binding and communicating with wolf spirits they are able to acces their wolf soul chakra. Once unleashed the wolf chakra is black or grey for some ninjas. This chakra allows the user to unleash the wolf inside them and use techniques unavailable other shinobi. Effect: Allows any clan ninjutsu and taijutsu to be use. All soul/death clan jutsu cost -10 less chakra/stamina to a minimum of 5 to use. All jutsu that require this skill are considered Soul Type Jutsus. Cost: -1sp Subtle Elementals: Cloud You may learn an elemental jutsu that is not from your village. Remember that you must specify which element you bought with this skill. Cost: -1 Quick Learner +10% EXP from Missions and Training. EXP given as holiday gifts or handed out from events by the staff are not included in this. Cost: -2sp Warrior: Longsword An attack from that specific weapon will do +5 Damage. Cost: -1sp Hindering: The Weakness of a Wolf Bloodline: Clan Skill Description: Wolves have very sensitive hearing, so loud noises and high-pitched noises damage their ears. As the Senuskai Clan grew, lived, and were surrounded by wolves they developed hearing and their sense of smell close to those of a wolf. Despite the success, a disadvantage was passed on to them as well. As with wolves, loud sounds also damaged the ears of the Senuskai Clan and bad smells also damaged the members of the Senuskai Clan's sense of smell. Effect: The user suffers 2x damage from Sound Techniques and any Technique that causes bad smells(X=Technique Damage). If impaired hearing is caused by any Sound Techniques, impaired hearing lasts for 2 extra turns. If impaired smell is caused by any technique that causes bad smell, impaired smell last for 2 extra turns. Must be taken at Character Creation. Cost: +3sp Skills learned from Jounins: ~Techniques~ Techniques: Basic Academy Jutsus: Name: Bunshin no Jutsu (Clone Technique) Type: Genjutsu Rank: Academy Student Cost: 10 Genjutsu Description: Creates an illusionary replica of the user. It is unable to attack or interact with other objects, but can serve as a good distraction. Damage: None Effects: Adds +5 evasion and +5 accuracy for each clone. Once a clone is hit it is destroyed, and the bonuses with it. Name: Henge no Jutsu (Transformation Technique) Type: Genjutsu Rank: Academy Student Cost: 5 Genjutsu Description: Wrap chakra around your body to change your appearance. You can still use the features of the thing you can become, e.g use the claws of a clawed animal, but not to the extent of if you were that thing. Damage: None Effects: Change your appearance. Name: Kawarimi no Jutsu (Body Substitute Technique) Type: Ninjutsu Rank: Academy Student Cost: 10 Ninjutsu Description: A lifesaver, and a must-have technique. With this technique, the user is able to swap their body with a nearby object, usually a log, which will take the full force of any incoming blows for them, while they retreat to safe ground or search for an opening. You can only use this 3 times per battle. Damage: None Effects: Evade the next attack aimed at you. You are unable to attack the opponent the turn you use this. You can only use this 3 times per battle. This technique cannot be used to dodge Ninjutsu, Taijutsu or Genjutsu Techniques. Other Jutsus: Spin Cycle (Jiten Shuuha) Type: Ninjutsu (Water) Rank: Gennin Cost: 40 Damage: 25 Effect:: A successful strike reduces defense by 20 for the next two posts. Description: A small whirlpool of water is created under the target and stabs up with great force, causing damage and disorientation. Points: 2 Name: Wolf Strike Type: Taijutsu Rank: Gennin Cost: 24 stamina Damage: 30 damage Effects: N/A Description: Being quick and stealthy like a wolf has its advantages. Using incredible speed and quick attacks. The user performs a series of punches on the opponent, scracthing them in the process. Attack the chest and shoulders, the opponent is knocked senseless. Causing them to be in great pain for a while. Points: 2 Jutsus learned from Jounins: ~Inventory~ Armor: -Head: Village Amulet (worn on neck) -Neck: -Body: Silver shirt with Senuskai clan emblem on back -Waist: -Forearm(s): -Hand(s): -Thigh(s): Plain black pants -Calve(s): -Feet: traditional sandals Weapons: -Main Weapon: Blade of Wrynn (Needs to be Approved) -Sub Weapon: -Un-equipped Slot one: -Un-equipped Slot two: -Un-equipped Slot three: Items-- -Pouch: 3 Shuriken, 3 Kunai, and 4 Needles -Items in Vault: Nothing -Money on hand: $125 ~Update Log~ Character Approval: Leveled up: Exp Earned: ~Money Log~ ~Battle Log~ Wins: Losses: Draws: ~Mission Log~ Rank D: Rank C: Rank B: Rank A: Rank S: Edited July 20, 2007 by Kassiel
Ice_Demon Posted July 10, 2007 Posted July 10, 2007 it looks pretty good i think any ways i'm no expert
Guest ditochi Posted July 10, 2007 Posted July 10, 2007 make clothing, physical description, and history longer. other than that i think it's ok. (didn't read it all)
shizuki Posted July 10, 2007 Posted July 10, 2007 Ignore ditochi. Clothing and physical descriptions are fine. Length of background is fine, but all the problems from the old topic still stand. Especially the one about how he was able to function in human society when he was raised without any major contact with humans.
Guest ditochi Posted July 10, 2007 Posted July 10, 2007 (edited) the money log doesn't hav to be there i think. below the bolded, underlined, ~technique~ thing u don't hav to put techniques again. well sorry for trying to help shizuki. mine used to be as short as his and ppl told me to make it longer Edited July 10, 2007 by ditochi
shizuki Posted July 10, 2007 Posted July 10, 2007 Money log does need to be there. Again, ignore ditochi. What matters is quality, not quantity. A short, well-written background is better than a huge pile of crap.
Warr Posted July 11, 2007 Posted July 11, 2007 (edited) Do you have permission from the Clan leader/Founder of the Sensukai to make a renegade clan member, and furthermore a renegade clan member who has fleed to Kirigakure no Sato? And from skimming his history, I'd like to state that Kiri's resistance is and has been very 'fractioned' and 'fractured' since the beginning, and I can't very well say that they'd let him in either, and he'd've had to run from his gennin squad within the NCIA too, if he came to Kirigakure no Sato. Furthermore, it'd not be history that'd he'd learn it in so much as recent events/current events and the indoctoration that surely would be involved in an academy ran by the NCIA, which is the only type of academy that exists. On top of that, Kirigakure no Sato's resistance, and Kirigakure no Sato itself for that matter isn't going to just "Accept" an immigrant from another village, especially from the village which invaded them, and more so from one of it's clans. The resistance isn't dumb. Edited July 11, 2007 by Warr
cntrstrk14 Posted July 11, 2007 Posted July 11, 2007 Answer the above, and yes, Ditochi doesn't know what he is talking about, so ignore him.
wolfnin Posted July 11, 2007 Posted July 11, 2007 Its about time I think I should post. To answer your question Warr yes, Kassiel has permission to join my clan and to become a renegade ninja. This is for future reference
Ichi Posted July 12, 2007 Posted July 12, 2007 they refused to believe it was he, they refused to believe it was him, Fix that little thing, about all I could find wrong with it, skills are fine, jutsu is fine, story is pretty good, short and to the point, not a bunch of crap we get sometimes. Nicely done, I would PM some Mod's with the link to this for approvals, unless we dont do that anymore I am not to sure, or post in their approval threads, etc.
Kassiel Posted July 20, 2007 Author Posted July 20, 2007 ok...i've fixed some things, shizuki, the whole "he doesn't function well in society" thing doesn't work? and about the sword, can someone PM me on how to make it work?
Ichi Posted July 21, 2007 Posted July 21, 2007 I think he means, lose the sword from your sheet until its approved, not to sure. I would wait for him.
Kassiel Posted August 5, 2007 Author Posted August 5, 2007 ok, it's been awhile, i'll leave the sword as it is and then post it in buy/sell once i'm pproved. Explain to me what needs to be done in order for this to work. I've already explained, he doesn't function all tha well in society, and have said this in the sheet. Twice. If there's anything i need to change, let me know. This is officially classified as a bump.
Warr Posted August 5, 2007 Posted August 5, 2007 And from skimming his history, I'd like to state that Kiri's resistance is and has been very 'fractioned' and 'fractured' since the beginning, and I can't very well say that they'd let him in either, and he'd've had to run from his gennin squad within the NCIA too, if he came to Kirigakure no Sato. Furthermore, it'd not be history that'd he'd learn it in so much as recent events/current events and the indoctoration that surely would be involved in an academy ran by the NCIA, which is the only type of academy that exists. On top of that, Kirigakure no Sato's resistance, and Kirigakure no Sato itself for that matter isn't going to just "Accept" an immigrant from another village, especially from the village which invaded them, and more so from one of it's clans. The resistance isn't dumb. His not functioning well in soiceity is just going to get him thrown out, as well, Kassiel. Fixed what I asked, please.
shizuki Posted August 5, 2007 Posted August 5, 2007 Empty the armor fields. Those are only for things that have an impact on your stats.
Chiri-o Posted August 6, 2007 Posted August 6, 2007 No, you don't put stuff on your sheet until you have them. So take the sword off now. Put it on, if you ever get approved and after you buy it.
Warr Posted August 6, 2007 Posted August 6, 2007 You can buy things when unapproved, but you add them to your sheet after you buy them and they've been approved.
Kassiel Posted August 6, 2007 Author Posted August 6, 2007 hey...can i be neutral, neither ncia or resistance? If there isn't a neutral party i'm gonna cry. Also, fixed the armor and the sword.
Warr Posted August 6, 2007 Posted August 6, 2007 According to Shizuki, there is no "Neutral" allegiance, you simply can't be it.
Shadow Posted August 8, 2007 Posted August 8, 2007 I don't know about joining a resistance academy. To my knowledge there is not official academy or way to contact the resistance in Kiri, so how would he know about it? Especially if he is native to Kumo.
Warr Posted August 8, 2007 Posted August 8, 2007 I don't know about joining a resistance academy. To my knowledge there is not official academy or way to contact the resistance in Kiri, so how would he know about it? Especially if he is native to Kumo. <3 Right-o, right-o. There is no such thing as a resistance academy, and the only way you can contact the resistance in Kiri is for them to contact you, and they're not likely to just tell a person who's a native of Kumo, especially a person of a clan which is a Kumo clan and which has fought against their people "Oh here, go to this place, and join the resistance here." They'd more than likely sooner murder a character in cold blood.
wolfnin Posted August 8, 2007 Posted August 8, 2007 (edited) Both Shadow and Warr have a point. Although what you could do is,(and I think people have said this before), start in another village and then move to Kiri. That is your best option there. Just becareful about what you say when ya get there. Edited August 8, 2007 by wolfnin
Warr Posted August 8, 2007 Posted August 8, 2007 Both Shadow and Warr have a point. Although what you could do is,(and I think people have said this before), start in another village and then move to Kiri. That is your best option there. Just becareful about what you say when ya get there. Actually, that wouldn't likely further his chances at joining the resistance or being 'accepted' amongst the Kiri-nin. The Resistances are not an unified organization, and quite frankly, coming from a Kumogakure no Sato Clan which is fully loyal to Kumogakure no Sato will not likely allow him to gain any ground ever amongst the Kirigakuran Shinobi. They'll never trust him, and would likely just slay him to get him out of their hair.
Kassiel Posted August 8, 2007 Author Posted August 8, 2007 (edited) ok, i think i'm just gonna shoot Kassiel and start over, this is NOT working. That makes me sad. Either that or someone link the kumo invasion posts, and i'll be NCIA, the whole "i wanna be resistance thing was from like 4 replies after my first shot at a character sheet. Does it still work that i wanna be Kiri? Edited August 8, 2007 by Kassiel
Kassiel Posted August 12, 2007 Author Posted August 12, 2007 ok, this is to be moved to the failed characters page, and i'm starting a new kiri nin.
