Cho Hakkai Posted December 22, 2004 Posted December 22, 2004 (edited) ... Edited November 10, 2006 by Cho Hakkai
Lemon Posted December 22, 2004 Posted December 22, 2004 you shouldnt have decimals in your stats, it would make thigns confusing. You cant start out with a weapon. Also try and space out your jutsu so they are easier to read...this also seems kinda like a joke(no offence) if your finished. you need to describe mostly everythign in more detail, especially elaborate on your background. (these are just suggestions)
Atlas Posted December 22, 2004 Posted December 22, 2004 Yea, definately make your background at the very least a paragraph. And even though your are trying to make you self balanced, you can't have decimal stats just like lemon said. And just to tell you, you'll probably die within 1. or 2. posts of a battle with that low of health.
Mr. Kitty Posted December 28, 2004 Posted December 28, 2004 (edited) Cho Hakkai is one of my favorites in Saiyuki... Sure, he's strong, but there is SO much more to him than that... so if you want to use Hakkai as a character, that's fine, but it'll be hard to roleplay a "pig" in Naruto's world. And also, if you need any help, you can PM me any time you'd like. Edited December 28, 2004 by Kat
shizuki Posted December 28, 2004 Posted December 28, 2004 -eh, everything needs to expanded. -put Reverse Circle into the tech sheet.
Guest Azrael Posted December 31, 2004 Posted December 31, 2004 Don't be unreasonable. Then again, if you can't take this little of criticism, you may just want to leave after all. Don't take things so critically, and relax. Seriously, all it takes is to swallow your pride, and we're willing to help. If you want to be a sound nin, we'll help you be one. In fact, we NEED Sound nins, so we want you to become one. Nonetheless, do as you please, I suppose
Cho Hakkai Posted December 31, 2004 Author Posted December 31, 2004 i am sorry for freaking out. I just had a bad day. I appologize for taking out my anger on the board.
Guest Azrael Posted December 31, 2004 Posted December 31, 2004 No problem. Now, if you have AIM or MSN, feel free to contact me at either: Azrael angel87 (AIM) or Zachariell@hotmail.com (MSN) I'd be glad to help you out!
Mr. Kitty Posted December 31, 2004 Posted December 31, 2004 I'll put this on the front page and edit out your old one.
Cho Hakkai Posted December 31, 2004 Author Posted December 31, 2004 SO.... am I accepted? (sry but i am still confused)
Guest Azrael Posted December 31, 2004 Posted December 31, 2004 You need two jutsus/techs, and if you want skills (Suggests you use some), you'll need them as well
Guest Azrael Posted December 31, 2004 Posted December 31, 2004 Sadly enough, you can't use either. You see, the cost reflects the minimum of what the stat must be. IE) Cost of 50 Gen means you lose 50 Chakra when it is used, but you need 50 Genjutsu to perform it
Guest Phoenix Posted January 2, 2005 Posted January 2, 2005 Alright, First things first. [im going off of the sheet on the first page.] - You have multiple versions of the academy Jutsu, clear that. [Only the 3 on the original sheet is necessary] - Add to Personal Jutsus of your own, ( I see you have done that, but it must be approved and it would seem it needs some revamping ) - And for the sake of your characters future in this roleplay, please explain how your parents died, and how your character was able to murder those thugs, or at least describe how he did so. -You may also add the Christmas bonus you recieve for getting a character up before Christmas [25th]. The details are located on the "News" Section. - Good luck with all this buddy.
Rei Posted January 2, 2005 Posted January 2, 2005 You cannot have One-handed Seals until you've done the training, remove it.
ChoongSung Posted January 2, 2005 Posted January 2, 2005 (edited) yeah do what rei said.. and nice lol, 150 health @_@ the most i've seen so far ^^ umm also you know your tech reverse circle? it kinda sems like its in a skill format... sorry but its just how i see it... if you need help just pm me :3 Edited January 2, 2005 by ChoongSung
Cho Hakkai Posted January 3, 2005 Author Posted January 3, 2005 ok ok i did everything to everyones degree so can i please be accepted <(/_\)>
Rei Posted January 3, 2005 Posted January 3, 2005 You have the academy student techs twice on your sheet remove them.
Cho Hakkai Posted January 5, 2005 Author Posted January 5, 2005 did it..... *pant pant* too *pant* much *pant * work *faints*
Atlas Posted January 6, 2005 Posted January 6, 2005 (edited) Wow, next time you say your done actually DO the things the people told you b4, like: -you STILL have an extra Kawirmi no Jutsu -your explanation of how your parents died is bland, actually tell the story of what happened Unofficial Pending Approval... Edit: And if you think this is too much work then you are sadly mistaken. If you think this is a lot of work, you may not be fit to RP...your char sheet his your first impression on Mods/Admins/Experienced Members (like myself), and just to tell you saying this too much work, that isn't a good first impression Edited January 6, 2005 by UchihaRenaro
Mr. Kitty Posted January 7, 2005 Posted January 7, 2005 Hey, don't fret. If you want, give me an IM and I'll help you out on your character sheet, yah?
Guest Fu Xi Posted January 9, 2005 Posted January 9, 2005 Mkay. Wow. This is the biggest spam-fest I have seen in a long time. And im not happy. NOBODY, and I mean NOBODY did the right thing here, so nobody shall be held at fault. But even still. Spamming is not permmited and I will not tolerate it any longer. So, after deleted almost 2 pages of spam, im left with a character sheet. And if you do the following things, you will be approved: -You need two Gennin level techniques. -You should take one of the 'Kawarimi no Jutsu's off. You only need to name them once. -Please dont do the parents dying thing...... Thats it. Now then, I hope your NA experience wasnt ruined by people who felt like they needed to be jerks. Status: Pending Approval
Cho Hakkai Posted January 11, 2005 Author Posted January 11, 2005 Now if there is anything else that i need to do, please please please, tell me.
